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post Jan 15 14, 05:15
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Version 2 6 Feb 2014 (Thanks Lori)

The weeks, the months, the fleeting years
all filled with wonder, joys and fears.
I've squandered many, (sad but true)
that’s not the path I’d wish for you.

A gift from God; each gilded day
for us to use in work or play.
The hours past are not returned
yet leave their lessons to be learned.

One precious minute paints your sky,
stays sixty seconds then shall fly
so mark each special second well;
they tick your life yet never dwell.



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The weeks, the months, the fleeting years
all filled with hopes and joys and fears.
I've squandered much (it's sad but true),
that’s not the path I’d wish for you.

A gift from God; each gilded day
for us to use in work or play.
The passing hour won't return
yet leaves a lesson to be learned.

One fleeting minute paints your sky,
stays sixty seconds then shall fly
so mark each special second well;
it checks your life yet will not dwell.


"unique" replaced by "special" (thanks Syl)




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Larry
post Jan 28 14, 13:50
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Real Name: Larry D. Jennings
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Hi Wally,

I like the change because, as you say, some words are a bit hard for children to understand. As far as "hour"
goes, down here in the deep south, there are some folks who actually break that word down to three syllables:
"ow-er-uh". Most of them are preaching in the pulpit when they do so.

Nice life lesson for the kids!

Larry


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