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 Jan 22 14, 09:32
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
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My love draws near; her breath upon my face is scented balm to soothe her sister’s wrath. I yearn to see her eyes, feel her embrace but know that time restrains. The forest path is still a lifeless track. Denuded trees raise barren boughs as though they would entreat her swift return. An antecedent breeze which stirs the life held in their umber feet beguiles me with its warm caress. She tempts me with a taste of what will soon appear when she reveals herself. Like forest nymphs, arising from what’s left of winter’s bier, she’ll dance through glens in diaphane and jade. Until that time, I’ll smile at each charade. ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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Jan 25 14, 11:57
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Larry,
I can't find a nit anyhow,  ! It's so lovely as is! Initially I got tripped up on the word 'beguiles' but it does work there.I LUV this image: Like forest nymphs, arising from what’s left of winter’s bier, The entire poem is beautiful. Congrats on the nom!  ~Cleo  ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner       |
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Larry Spring ** Jan 22 14, 09:32 
Cleo_Serapis Oh, what lovely images here, Larry!
57 days ... Jan 23 14, 15:55 Maureen Delightful Larry - very much enjoyed this Jan 24 14, 03:55 Eisa This is absolutely beautiful, Larry, it's on o... Jan 24 14, 15:08 Larry Hi Lori,
Don't ponder too hard about crits an... Jan 24 14, 15:55 Cleo_Serapis Hi Larry,
Can I send this lovely gem along to IBP... Jan 31 14, 15:44 Larry Hi Lori,
Yes Please!
Thank You and Snow... Feb 1 14, 17:57 Cleo_Serapis Best of luck - it's on its way! Feb 2 14, 11:03 Eisa Good Luck Larry
Snow Feb 4 14, 16:55 Alan Dear Larry,
Having just posted my sonnet, I feel ... Feb 9 14, 04:52 Larry Hi Alan,
Welcome back! Long time no see. Of... Feb 9 14, 22:51 Alan Dear Larry,
Thank you. I had forgotten about the ... Feb 10 14, 02:41 Thoth Hello Larry
Glad your muse is thawing out even it ... Feb 10 14, 07:36 Larry Hi Wally,
Thanks for dropping by for a read. Gla... Feb 11 14, 08:24 
Thoth Hi Larry
That rhyme still worries me cause even t... Feb 12 14, 06:27 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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