Moments of Time, For my Grandchildren ** Options

[Thoth]

Version 2 6 Feb 2014 (Thanks Lori)

The weeks, the months, the fleeting years
all filled with wonder, joys and fears.
I've squandered many, (sad but true)
that’s not the path I’d wish for you.

A gift from God; each gilded day
for us to use in work or play.
The hours past are not returned
yet leave their lessons to be learned.

One precious minute paints your sky,
stays sixty seconds then shall fly
so mark each special second well;
they tick your life yet never dwell.



Original

The weeks, the months, the fleeting years
all filled with hopes and joys and fears.
I've squandered much (it's sad but true),
that’s not the path I’d wish for you.

A gift from God; each gilded day
for us to use in work or play.
The passing hour won't return
yet leaves a lesson to be learned.

One fleeting minute paints your sky,
stays sixty seconds then shall fly
so mark each special second well;
it checks your life yet will not dwell.


"unique" replaced by "special" (thanks Syl)

[Psyche]

Ive not been hibernating, but I'm half dead all the same

Been moving house, from one province to another. From sprawling city to mountains and lakes. Etc. With very little help. During previous moves I don't remember feeling so emotionally charged. Took me ages! Would like to chat about that topic, but not now.

OK, I came here before, but I'm back to say that I think it's a great poem for children, and adults as well. A good one for checking out whether one said such wise things to the kids...It leaves me wishful, thoughtful. About how our kids inevitably stumble. lose time, follow the wrong signposts, etc.

Lovely piece, Wally! I understand the 'hour' issue. I was raised to pronnounce it 'au-er', something like that! Maybe somewhere, if you look hard enough, you'll find some sort of justification.... In my country, end rhymes can give you a + 1/2 syll, if the word is short and strongly emphasized on last syll. So one has to fit another 1/2 syll or poetic/grammatical figure to get it perfect.

So my tiny nit is in S4L3, with the word unique. Perhaps if you show me how you pronounce unique, and where the emphasis in words and line goes, then I'd appreciate it better. At the moment I stumble with the meter there, being no expert, as you know.

The rest is fine. I'm so glad I dropped in again and found this gem!

Peace, Syl ***