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 Oct 19 13, 23:58
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,013 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting  |
 I love you in your ludicrous underwear, diapers and socks notwithstanding; half-moon specs awry on the tip of your nose, add just the right touch to that bib with blue bears in rows. I love your mortal guise -or the Prince in a Beast’s disguise- and wince with compassion for my elderly nurseling. Perhaps each Rose that turned to gall blossomed from a paradox of parts. Crimson petals ....... soft as Indian silk ..............fade .....................and dart away… Beauty also unrobed the Beast. The charm was broken and a handsome Prince stood before her. Except, you’re a clumsy prince ....... who subsists ..............only .....................in my desolate heart. © Sylvia Evelyn, Buenos Aires, Argentina. 2013 Note: Changed lonesome to desolate in last line. ·······  ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
  
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Oct 20 13, 10:36
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 Egyptian  Posts: 327 Joined: 17-May 08 From: San Juan Puerto Rico Member No.: 508 Real Name: Sergio Ortiz Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE Perhaps each Rose that turned to gall blossomed from a paradox of parts. I really loved the entire poem but these lines stand out for me, Sylvia. Great poem. Sergio ······· ······· |
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Oct 27 13, 01:22
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 10,013 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Thank you very much, Sergio, for your encouraging words. I'm glad you like the whole poem.
Cheers, Syl*** QUOTE (saore @ Oct 20 13, 13:36 )  QUOTE Perhaps each Rose that turned to gall blossomed from a paradox of parts. I really loved the entire poem but these lines stand out for me, Sylvia. Great poem. Sergio ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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Psyche Prince in Disguise Oct 19 13, 23:58 
Eisa A tremendously moving poem, Syl, which stirred up ... Oct 22 13, 17:13 
Psyche Thank you, Eisa. I think I was feeling emotional a... Oct 27 13, 01:38 Cleo_Serapis Hi Sylvia,
A moving poem with just the right touc... Oct 27 13, 09:40 Psyche Thank you so much, Lori, for the nom. I don't ... Oct 28 13, 00:04 Cleo_Serapis Hi Sylvia,
YAY! Glad you approve the nod... Oct 28 13, 05:44 saore The more I read this one the more it draws me in. ... Oct 27 13, 15:14 Psyche Thanks again, Sergio. You lift my spirits.
I love... Oct 28 13, 00:06 Eisa Hi Syl
I am so pleased this has been nominated. I... Oct 28 13, 18:02 Psyche Thanks so much, Lori and Eisa, for your help!
... Oct 30 13, 02:27 Cleo_Serapis Hi Syl,
I won't send it in with the dots. I p... Oct 30 13, 06:22 Larry Hi Syl,
Don't get over here much but I'm ... Oct 30 13, 13:14 Psyche Hi Larry,
I'm delighted that you came over to ... Nov 3 13, 01:00 Cleo_Serapis Oh good catch Larry. Syl asked me to add that chan... Nov 1 13, 06:15 Sekhmet Dear Syl, - I came late to this feast of a poem -... Feb 23 14, 14:28 Psyche Oh my, Leo, true love is a wonderful thing, but ho... Feb 26 14, 16:43 Eisa Hi Syl,
I came back to have another read of this ... Feb 26 14, 18:18 Psyche Thank you, Eira, for your good vibes, sent so long... Jun 4 14, 23:42 jerryk QUOTE (Psyche @ Oct 19 13, 21:58 )
I lo... Jun 5 14, 08:59 Psyche Hi Jerry!
It seems I missed this comment from... Jul 6 14, 23:31 Eisa Wow! Syl - Snow! Were just coming into sum... Jun 6 14, 14:59 Psyche Yes, it's strange now that I've moved furt... Jul 6 14, 23:09 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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