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 Sep 22 13, 09:13
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 Egyptian  Posts: 327 Joined: 17-May 08 From: San Juan Puerto Rico Member No.: 508 Real Name: Sergio Ortiz Writer of: Poetry  |
A Distant Planet
and there, Beside the thundering waterfall of his heart, I rubbed my eyes and thought, “I’m lost.” ............................... Rafael Campo I said, it's like lifting a cello out of its case— “but what do I know of love's lonely offices” I'm positive, he said... so I chanted the sweaty shaman's painted curse I'd look inside his throat to see his misery, he'd touch his genitals and think of sin ·······  ······· |
  
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Sep 30 13, 16:08
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi Sergio
This is incredibly powerful and moving. Thank you for posting the info about Rafael Campo. I love the way you have opened your poem with his quote. I have read this a few times and see nothing I'd change. Snow 
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saore A Distant Planet Sep 22 13, 09:13 
Psyche Wow, this is powerful, Sergio. You've said suc... Sep 24 13, 01:54 Psyche OK, Sergio, I've already looked up Rafael Camp... Sep 24 13, 02:10 saore I found a few of his poems in Poets.org and he imm... Sep 24 13, 06:15 jeannefiedler I have experienced people dying of AIDs, and I und... Sep 29 13, 11:29 saore Thank you Jeanne. Sorry for your loss.
Sergio Sep 29 13, 17:12 saore thank you Snow, thank you.
Sergio Sep 30 13, 16:23 Maureen I wouldn't change anything either - you say so... Oct 1 13, 16:55 saore Thank you Maureen. Living through the first ten y... Oct 1 13, 17:27 Psyche Thanks for all the info on Rafael Campo, Sergio. H... Oct 2 13, 23:33 
saore Thank you Sylvia. I am glad there is education in... Oct 3 13, 05:43 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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