 A Door to Curiosity REVISION #1 **** CRIT WELCOME, variation on a sonnet, from a challenge |
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 Jun 22 13, 06:10
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 20,748 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
In case you're curious, Sylvia suggested that I post this here from the challenges:
REVISION #1 ... Thanks, Larry and Lori!  A Door to Curiosity Walking the halls of his high school last week, something made his curiosity peak. Daybreak peeked in from a place where he swore he'd never noticed a doorway before! Faintly a song had emerged from the mist seeping out under the door... which was locked. Nearly in shock, he looked 'round to enlist help to gain entrance to where he had knocked. No one was there, so he battered and kicked 'til he became so worn out, he sat down right where he was, heaving hard; he was licked.... Suddenly out of the space came a clown mocking the rube like Uriah the Heep. Thoroughly humbled, I woke from my sleep. © MLee Dickens'son 2013 from a challenge to use the words: daybreak, song, mist and shock... and the phrase: He'd never noticed a door there before. ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jun 24 13, 18:00
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Ha ha Daniel!
That was a fun poem to read; glad to see the Pandora challenge sparked this response. Cheers, ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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Jul 20 13, 11:53
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 20,748 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Jun 24 13, 19:00 )  Ha ha Daniel! That was a fun poem to read; glad to see the Pandora challenge sparked this response. Cheers, ~Cleo I'm glad for it to, Lori! Once in a while the challenge not only sparks something, but sparks something worthy of further work and consideration. I'm pleased that this one has done that. In fact nothing of mine has been nominated for MANY years. I guess I haven't posted many of my 'serious' pieces for some time either, so that could be a reason as well. At any rate, thank you for the spark! deLightingly, Daniel  ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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JustDaniel A Door to Curiosity REVISION #1 **** CRIT WELCOME Jun 22 13, 06:10 
Larry Hi Daniel,
Surely "A Door To Curiosity... Jun 23 13, 23:31 
JustDaniel QUOTE (Larry @ Jun 24 13, 00:31 ) Hi Dani... Jul 20 13, 11:48 Merlin Hi JD,
I wrote one a while back that wasn't in... Jun 24 13, 17:08 JustDaniel QUOTE (Merlin @ Jun 24 13, 18:08 ) Hi JD,... Jul 20 13, 11:50 Psyche Hey Merlin!
I've enjoyed this 'dif... Jun 27 13, 03:19 JustDaniel QUOTE (Psyche @ Jun 27 13, 04:19 ) Hey Me... Jul 20 13, 11:59 Larry Hey Sylvia,
I know Merlin posted right before you... Jun 27 13, 08:45 JustDaniel Hey, y'all....
I've been away for a week... Jul 1 13, 06:35 Larry Hi Daniel,
Welcome back from your holiday. Sorry... Jul 1 13, 10:14 JustDaniel QUOTE (Larry @ Jul 1 13, 11:14 ) Hi Danie... Jul 20 13, 12:47 Psyche So sorry, Daniel, for my mixup, please forgive... Jul 6 13, 15:06 JustDaniel QUOTE (Psyche @ Jul 6 13, 16:06 ) So sorr... Jul 20 13, 12:50 Cleo_Serapis Hi Daniel,
I came back to take another 'peek... Jul 15 13, 13:28 JustDaniel QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Jul 15 13, 14:28 ) ... Jul 20 13, 12:54 JustDaniel Thank you all for your assistance with this. I de... Jul 15 13, 17:21 Cleo_Serapis Hi Daniel,
Just checking in - are we going to be... Jul 20 13, 10:31 JustDaniel QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Jul 20 13, 11:31 ) ... Jul 20 13, 13:10 Larry Hi Daniel,
Excellent revision...
It has lilt and... Jul 20 13, 16:09 JustDaniel Thank you for your help, Larry, and I appreciate y... Jul 20 13, 21:01 Cleo_Serapis Hi Daniel,
FABULOUS revision! Nice inner rhym... Jul 21 13, 12:27 Cleo_Serapis Hi Daniel,
I just noticed one more thing and want... Jul 21 13, 18:55 Psyche Hi Daniel, at last!
I had a good laugh wh... Jul 27 13, 01:49 Cleo_Serapis Hi Daniel,
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