Wow!!! Instead of two or three days, all this in less than 12 hours? Thank you all for your visits and your input.
Hi Marcia, Thanks for the read and the nice words.
Hi Merlin, thanks for catching the misplaced “s-c”. I’ll change that. I have been working on this piece a bit while off-line and made a few changes. As far as the “early” volta, I’ve read and researched a lot of sonnet forms or their variants and with each, I get the impression that the “turn” has no real chiseled-in-stone rule except for the original Italian form and even the rule of thumb for the volta in that form is “usually around L9 between the octave and the sestet”. In the Shakespearian Sonnet, the volta can fall anywhere between L9 and L13. The Bowlesian sonnets also share this volta placement. I think Shelly in his poem “Ozymandias” placed his volta at L9 but it has been argued that this is also where he switches from past to present tense. I’m not a total purist of form poetry because there are probably 40-50 different sonnet types with different rhyme schemes, volta positioning, couplet requirements, etc. and I would drive myself crazy trying to conform to loosely worded stipulations. Anyway, thanks for the visit and I hope you enjoy the edits.
Hello Lori, If you’ll notice, S2L2 already uses “hue” in the rhyme scheme. Can’t use it before the rhyme or twice in the same sonnet. ‘T wouldn’t do!
Hi Snow, Glad you dropped in and “painted” is gone in the edit. I’m happy that you enjoyed the imagery.
Okay Daniel,
I’m eagerly awaiting your crits and observations on the bumps but am happy you have the same feelings about the volta. I’ve tried, in the above paragraph to Merlin, to explain my placement of the volta in this poem (mine aren’t always in the same place) and a few points of reasoning.
To all, pardon the classroom instructions. Hope you all like the changes!
Larry
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