Laugh Lines (Revised, with thanks), Sonnet Options

[MFK Buckley]

Thank you for the crits, I've adjusted happily accordingly. However consider a man who, if chastened, hastens to recall... F


Laugh Lines

If years from now you hasten to recall
my witticisms in another light,
inflections, buoyant once, are apt to fall,
deflecting into peevishness despite
how we are now. (Though I’ve said this before
in other arms, interpretations blurred.)
When we no longer linger I’ll ignore
you passing; it’s both best and most preferred.
But always you will be to me, as now,
endearingly disarmed, without a name.
Should memories of this conspire somehow
to recollect me harshly, you’re to blame:
the heft and cleave of me without the laughter
was all it meant, and all that you were after.

MFK Buckley



Laugh Lines

If years from now you hasten to recall
my witticisms in another light
inflections, buoyant once, are apt to fall
deflecting into peevishness despite
how we are now. (But I’ve said this before
in other arms, interpretations blurred.)
When you no longer linger I’ll ignore
your leaving; given that, don’t be disturbed.
You’ll always be to me as you are now –
endearingly disarmed, without a name.
Should memories of this conspire somehow
to recollect me harshly, you’re to blame:
the heft and cleave of me without the laughter
was all it meant, and all that you were after.

MFK Buckley

[Merlin]

Hello Fran,
and it is delightful to see your name on the screen once again. What times we had in cyberspace (along with Sue) and the volleys we did. Twas grand.

I've all but given up the critique thing, and what with moving and other adventures, haven't done much with the pen for a considerable while. Also, I've moved into the other camp while still remaining here, and that (FV) has been both learning experience and a new way of looking at the written word.

Wonderful to see you're still with Spenser. I've discovered a few more poets who have used the form during my search for what is FV. There might be a mite of a nudge for me to try some myself.

All's well on the western front. I've left city life for a rural (tiny town) setting, which is my project to fix up and see what happens. You see, more motivation to get the Spens out!

There tis,

Merlin