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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox  |
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Kiss and Make-up I watched a make-over… Her eyes had left the cardboard cut-outs of her former self. Hunchbacked, in grey, she stood and waited for comment. The public guessed: at least a decade older. Her face and frame wrinkled on an ironing board. Facial massage, nourishing cream and colourful eye shadows, took old Frances, wrung her out, and spread her fresh appearance with full, ruby lips on the TV screen. A chic presenter draped a new wardrobe over her shoulders; hairdressers cut, coloured and shaped her exhausted hair. Emerging from the set, her family failed to recognize her. Copyright © Beverleigh Gail Annegarn, October 2010 Kiss and Make-up (new title) I watched a make-over… Her eyes had left the cardboard cut-outs of her former self. Hunchbacked, in grey, she stood and waited for comment. The public guessed: at least a decade older. Her face and frame wrinkled on an ironing board. Facial massage, nourishing cream and colourful eye shadows, took old Frances, wrung her out, and spread her fresh appearance with full, ruby lips on the TV screen. A chic presenter draped a new wardrobe over her shoulders; hairdressers cut, coloured and shaped her exhausted hair. Emerging from the set, her family failed to recognize her. Copyright © Beverleigh Gail Annegarn, October 2010 ·······  ······· |
  
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Oct 26 10, 18:09
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,061 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi Bev!
I've also been absent with family problems...never a dull moment. This is a great poem. But you haven't mentioned plastic surgery! Didn't this Frances go under the scalpel, seeing that her family didn't recognise her?! Fact is, I'm intrigued as to whether Frances is a T.V. personality whom everybody knows and I'm completely in the dark. Why did she appear on T.V.? I really love this poem and have no nits, just questions. Do come back & educate me, hugs, Syl*** ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
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Oct 27 10, 00:35
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
QUOTE (Psyche @ Oct 27 10, 01:09 )  Hi Bev! I've also been absent with family problems...never a dull moment. This is a great poem. But you haven't mentioned plastic surgery! Didn't this Frances go under the scalpel, seeing that her family didn't recognise her?! Fact is, I'm intrigued as to whether Frances is a T.V. personality whom everybody knows and I'm completely in the dark. Why did she appear on T.V.? I really love this poem and have no nits, just questions. Do come back & educate me, hugs, Syl*** Hello Syl - good to see you here. Sorry re problems...we have had all sorts of distractions...80th parties x2 - which we hosted, 25th party, overseas guests, travel and now renovations...! As it happened this person did not have plastic surgery. She is an architect in fact, and needed posture re shaping, exciting/well styled, semi professional clothing (as opposed to grey cardigan and jeans), a good skin moisturiser, hair cut etc. She had a reasonable body. Oh, sorry she had some teeth cleaning etc. But, it was fascinating to see her emerge...hope she keeps up the new image... Keep in touch and take care. Bev ······· ······· |
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Peterpan Kiss and Make-up Oct 21 10, 15:57 
ohsteve Bev, Extreme make-over senior edition! eh... Oct 21 10, 19:34 Peterpan Thanks for dropping in Steve. Good to hear from yo... Oct 22 10, 02:29 Eisa Hi Bev
I really loved this one - it's so good... Oct 25 10, 14:06 Peterpan Hi Snow~ Thank you for stopping by! I agree wi... Oct 26 10, 01:59 JLY Bev,
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Peterpan QUOTE (JLY @ Oct 26 10, 18:27 ) Bev,
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