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Be Still

Siren View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Sep 27 10, 16:09 Post #1
Laureate Legionnaire Group: Gold Member Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry	"Seize!" "Quiet down!" "Release me!" My body vibrates these chants with each passing fortnight. Nocturnal- ceaseless- pin pricking numbs humane reactions. Imaginary Choruses of raging waves ravish my days and nights. Weakly twisting between soaked sheets, my tears are embraced by drought. Morning light stings swollen reddened orbs, filtered through UV protective lenses. Pill box flaps heavily in my pocket, with timers buzzing each ones' turn. "Seize!" My shuffling feet resonate my pleas, as each full moon rises then falls. I know this needs a lot of work but this is my first attempt at writing for months... Hope to get your feedback. Dani ·············· Happiness is a journey, not a destination. "A good book is not read and forgotten. It lingers in the mind of the reader, reshaping thoughts, asking new questions, revisiting ancient ones." MM Award Winner

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Siren View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Oct 2 10, 14:01 Post #2
Laureate Legionnaire Group: Gold Member Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry	Dearest Syl, Thanks so much for the lovely comments and yes this does need some trimming. I guess this is half of my cure and am sure you understand it well. Hope to get your feedback when you have time. Hugs and love Dani ·············· Happiness is a journey, not a destination. "A good book is not read and forgotten. It lingers in the mind of the reader, reshaping thoughts, asking new questions, revisiting ancient ones." MM Award Winner