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 Aug 16 10, 15:34
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A light Autumn's Haze
Haunted by the ghosts of Falls gone past and those yet to arrive. This Autumns quintessential day fills me up. My morning with a soft lakeside mist full with the aroma of smoke ended embers, half-eaten hot dogs, and Oak and Hickory. Where we dabble our toes amongst the dark stars, quiet breathing memories, rocket ships, cherished friends, apple cores and kisses. It was a day like this some thirty years ago we tried it all for the first time. And now the last V's are herding us home. It's been a day of brass beams breaking through clouds, sun is purpling the late sky and a distant train echoes like an oboe quartet calling out the stars. 16 Aug ,2010 © Steve Pray |
  
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Sep 10 10, 17:19
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi Steve
I don't know how I have come to miss this gem - a few suggestions: A light Autumn's Haze Good title Haunted by the ghosts of Falls [gone] past and those yet to arrive. This Autumns quintessential day fills me up. My morning with a soft lakeside mist full with the aroma of smoke ended embers, half-eaten hot dogs, [and] Oak and Hickory. Where we dabble our toes amongst the dark stars, quiet breathing memories, rocket ships, cherished friends, apple cores and kisses. This is a great St - love it! It was a day like this some thirty years ago we tried it all for the first time. And now the last V's are herding us home. It's been a day of brass beams breaking through clouds, sun is purpling the late sky and a distant train echoes like an oboe quartet calling out the stars. This is my favourite stanza - wonderful descriptions I really enjoyed the read Snow 
·······  ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
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ohsteve A light Autumn's Haze Aug 16 10, 15:34 
merle Hi Steve -
Yes, there are a few crits to be made ... Aug 17 10, 03:51 dflore sorry but mostly too cliche' for my liking Aug 29 10, 00:24 AMETHYST HiYa Steve,
Been wanting to get to this for a fe... Sep 13 10, 01:09 ohsteve Eira, thanks for your kind words and simple nits, ... Oct 16 10, 17:03 ohsteve Liz, welcome back full force...what a wonderful cr... Oct 16 10, 17:23 
dflore I read two lines and had to stop. Haunted by ghost... Dec 10 10, 15:36 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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