Not Alone *** Revised, Villanelle Options

[Michelle]

Not Alone - Revised

My time is not my own
when siblings seek a hand.
I値l never be alone.

Our children always moan
for needs and wants expand;
my time is not my own.

My husband takes his throne,
his wish is my command:
I値l never be alone.

I use a soothing tone;
as Mother痴 wits disband.
My time is not my own

when friends decide to phone.
A party urged and planned:
I値l never be alone.


God痴 plan, once dim, now shown;
He gives where life demands.
My time is not my own--
I値l never be alone.




Not Alone

My time is not my own
when siblings seek a hand;
I値l never be alone.

The children always moan.
Their needs and wants expand.
My time is not my own.

My husband wears cologne;
we dance beside the band.
I値l never be alone.

I use a soothing tone
as Mother痴 wits disband.
My time is not my own.

When friends decide to phone
our barbeque is planned;
I値l never be alone.

His voice, once dim, has grown;
God speaks as life demands.
My time is not my own--
I値l never be alone.

[Michelle]

Hi Liz,

it is great to see you again. Thank you for going through the poem. You poetic sensibilities are excellent.

In the first stanza, my intention is that the siblings are my own brothers and sisters. It didn't occur to me that another meaning could be inferred. (smiling) I am the eldest of my siblings and thus brothers and sisters have always entailed responsibility for me. At face value, I believe that meaning is there. (hopefully - lol)

As I said to Jim, this could be better fleshed out with longer lines, but I don't trust my ability as yet. I'm taking my revival in poetry slow.

Thanks so much for replying to this poem. It took me a while to get some spare time to get back here. Sorry for the long pause to respond to your thoughts. I appreciate them immensely.

my best,

Michelle