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Crayons Don't Cry

Colored smudges on the table top
from the picture she drew, now hanging
by alphabet magnets on our fridge.

A typical drawing of a six year old;
stick figures of mom and dad,
her and baby sister.

Yellow flowers in front of a red house,
with a bee as big as a hummingbird.

Our house isn't red...

That's OK, I put smoke coming out
the top, but we don't have a fireplace.

Why do mommy and daddy have tears?
'Cause you're sad about nana dying.
Why don't you have tears?
'Cause I know, she's in heaven.

She went out to play, while thoughts
of red houses, fireplaces and heaven
soared with my afternoon tea.

Feb. 17, 2010
© Steve Pray

[Ephiny]

Hi Steve,

This is so beautiful and so absolutely right...the child's voice is just perfect. You give a lovely insight into her world and the poignancy of that place where the worlds of the child and the adult touch.

Yellow flowers in front of a red house,
with a bee as big as a hummingbird. (brilliant...I love the way children portray little things as big in their drawings)

and this is wonderful:

Our house isn't red...

That's OK, I put smoke coming out
the top, but we don't have a fireplace.

I also love how you ended it...again, that clash between worlds and a quiet, peaceful end where the adult is soothed and strengthened by the vision of the child...that's a simplisitic way of putting it, I know but I really liked it.

I can't think of any suggestions for you but I really enjoyed this (and love your title) xx