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 Assyrian  Posts: 262 Joined: 4-February 09 Member No.: 756 Real Name: Robin DeWalt Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Winning Writer's web site  |
I've never seen an angel's toe
laced in golden thong. But I have seen the devil's hand in every deed that's wrong. Where is the harp, the flute, and fife to play me through this silent life? If only God would breathe in me a deeper faith to set me free, I'd drop my burdens gratefully and walk the shores I cannot see. ·······  ······· |
  
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May 28 10, 16:40
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Assyrian Posts: 262 Joined: 4-February 09 Member No.: 756 Real Name: Robin DeWalt Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Winning Writer's web site |
Hi Kimi, Karen, and Snow -
Thank you all for your positive comments. I really like Karen's suggestion and will use it. Thank you Karen! Since it's just one word I'm only going to revise the original poem rather than place a complete revison above. I hope that's acceptable, if not let me know. Robin ······· ······· |
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May 28 10, 19:06
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (merle @ May 28 10, 22:40 )  Hi Kimi, Karen, and Snow - Thank you all for your positive comments. I really like Karen's suggestion and will use it. Thank you Karen! Since it's just one word I'm only going to revise the original poem rather than place a complete revison above. I hope that's acceptable, if not let me know. Robin Yes that's perfectly acceptable, Robin - no need for a complete rewrite. You could always write the original line you've changed underneath, so that people know what it was before the change. Snow 
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merle Breathe In Me May 27 10, 05:08 
anaisa Hi merle,
This is really nice! Just a few sug... May 27 10, 10:26 ohsteve Robin, Welcome back,,,been long time no see. your ... May 27 10, 22:27 merle Hi Karen - Thank you so much for taking the time ... May 28 10, 00:31 Kimi Hi Robin,
This is beautiful. I love the message i... May 28 10, 01:40 anaisa and walk the shores I cannot see. ?? May 28 10, 15:02 Eisa Hi Robin
It is so good to read your work again. ... May 28 10, 15:30 
Psyche Hi Robin!
This is so gently inspirational. It... May 28 10, 22:17 merle Hi Syl -
Thanks for stopping by regardless of the... May 31 10, 00:21 Mary Boren Hi Merle ... er, Robin?
We met briefly last year ... Jul 7 10, 16:52 Cleo_Serapis Hi Robin,
I too thoroughly enjoyed this - and the... Jul 9 10, 14:24 merle Hi Mary,
Yes, by all means use my name...Robin. ... Jul 9 10, 15:36 
merle Hi Cleo,
Thank you for the kind comments. I agre... Jul 9 10, 15:38 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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