Zenta Options

[Merlin]

Zenta *

All summer long, each afternoon was filled
with love’s green golden radiance.
Clouds tumbled and frolicked,
utterly carefree like the pair of us
who, not burdened by schedules,
belonged to the wind.
We ran like cobblestones on streets,
unbiased and yielding to the call of the sea.

Headlong into the waves we dove
and battled back to shore.
We were Leda and the Swan
where ancient cedars guard the waterfall,
sentinels of five-hundred winters,
thunder, lightning, and hailstones.

High in the blue,
eagles described lazy circles.
We were champions of sandcastles
till September
lacquered the land with autumn rain.



* This is from summertime, and was posted elsewhere. The readers there made much of the title, since it isn't what you'd normally see. Readers here are encouraged NOT to decipher the title, rather make it any of person-place-or-thing, whatever works for you. There is no special significance or meaning attached, other than I had to call it something.

[Thoth]

Eric!!!
Why on earth are you still fooling with trivial rhyme when you are able to to write such outstanding poetry as this?

After the first line it
swept me away in gust of wind,
soaring up - floating - then, swooping down
to allow my feet a few fast steps
before bouncing away again.

Wonderful FF indeed and perhaps one of the best I have ever read (bar none)! Into my folder of "poetry to covert" it shall go thank you.

The only place that stuck for me was the break-point for the last line. I wanted to read it as;

"We were champions of sandcastles
till September lacquered the land
with autumn rain."

Damm! one seldom sees good FF that flows like a fluttering heartbeat!

It's 02:55, I woke up from pain and went online to get my mind off it.

Thanks Doc.