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Epitath, Short poem

ace View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Aug 4 09, 17:59 Post #1
Babylonian Group: Gold Member Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty	Epitaph It all went so fast: I should have looked more; I should have listened, and, perhaps, sometimes felt more before now. ace

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Arnfinn View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Aug 7 09, 02:21 Post #2
Creative Chieftain Group: Centurion Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry	G'day, Ross Epitath It all went so fast: I should have looked more; <<< You could use a bracketing comma, here mate, because if you deleted ' I should have listened' the poem still makes sense. I should have listened, and, perhaps, sometimes felt more before now. Epitath It all went so fast: I should have looked more; >>> Perhaps, delete 'more' I should have listened, and, perhaps, sometimes felt more before now. Regards, John ·············· Arnfinn Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner