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 Jul 31 09, 11:44
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Harbour waters
I see me in my daughters face Alice44 |
  
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Alice44,
A nice image here in this one! I tend to think of this as a Senyru though since its about 'people'. Either way - its lovely!  My question as a reader is, "why choose 'harbour waters'?" Is there a further significance we don't yet understand? Cheers ~Cleo 
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alice Haiku Jul 31 09, 11:44 
ace Alice:
Nice image. But even if you ignore the... Jul 31 09, 15:24 alice hi Ace..not sure I agree with balancing by numbers... Aug 1 09, 08:00 alice Hi Cleo, I agree with the senryu..and this was wri... Aug 2 09, 08:37 Arnfinn G'day.
Love the imagery.
Regards,
John Aug 3 09, 04:58 ohsteve Alice, I already stated my trouble with Hiaku/ Sen... Aug 3 09, 16:21 Eisa Harbour waters
I see me in my
daughters face
Ali... Aug 3 09, 18:32 alice Steve, hi
I love how one ku can develop into so ma... Aug 4 09, 10:15 Cleo_Serapis Ooohhhh - I'm fond of this variation:
two fac... Aug 4 09, 13:44 Thoth Loved the image, It is getting us all inspired... Aug 4 09, 16:13 Eisa Hi Alice
I love both of your further thoughts on ... Aug 4 09, 16:40 alice Cleo, glad you liked it..I love how we can feed of... Aug 4 09, 19:11 alice Wally, I look forward to reading yours..
thanks so... Aug 4 09, 19:13 alice Snow thank you..
I find these forms difficult. It ... Aug 4 09, 19:17 JustDaniel Hey, Alice...
love what you're doing, and som... Sep 6 09, 18:57 
Larry Hi Alice,
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