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 Jul 8 09, 17:42
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 Babylonian  Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty  |
Been critiquing the haikus and sewnuru's of others...so felt I should give everyone a shot at one of mine:
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The morning despairs... silence across the table... a still death of love. ace |
  
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Jul 31 09, 22:31
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 9,003 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi ace! How strange it is that different lines appeal to different people. Personally, I find your Senryu highly striking. It certainly makes one think. It's so sad...maybe somebody died and it's the first breakfast without that person? Silence can be so loud... Keep 'em coming! Syl*** QUOTE (ace @ Jul 9 09, 00:42 )  Been critiquing the haikus and sewnuru's of others...so felt I should give everyone a shot at one of mine: Quiet The morning despairs; silence across the table; a still death of love. ace ·······  ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
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ace Quiet Jul 8 09, 17:42 
Marc-Andre Germain Hi Ace,
You've captured a moment, and it... Jul 8 09, 21:56 prerna bala yeah, i think the haiku of yours captures the mome... Jul 22 09, 05:30 Arnfinn G'day, Mate.
The morning despairs; >... Jul 27 09, 07:56 alice Hi Ace,
I believe haiku is a very visual art form... Jul 28 09, 09:20 Cleo_Serapis Hi Ace,
I'm still trying to learn these short... Jul 28 09, 20:00 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Ace,
The problem with senryus is that what... Aug 1 09, 07:28 Psyche I absolutely agree with Peggy about the punctuatio... Aug 1 09, 13:00 
ace Peggy * Syl:
You are both completely correct. ... Aug 1 09, 16:35 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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