Hi marc,
Interesting "poodle/noodle" senryu. If you're going to be true to Japanese tradition on one front, shouldn't you follow through on all fronts? Correct me if you know something I don't, but I believe a rhyme in a haiku/senryu is a "no-no." I did do rather much research on this question last year and came to the conclusion that it is taboo.
Whatcha think?
Peggy
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