an American haiku (spring dance...), a one-liner Options

[Marc-Andre Germa...]

spring dance, robins twitter to the taps of clogs

[Marc-Andre Germa...]

John,

I begin to feel like I am here to critique my own poems...Why don't you tell me what you see in it? An then I could respond...I've posted some helpful links below. I have titled it "an American Haiku" so as not to see yet another thread where we end up debating over "terms" without ever actually workshopping the poem I have posted. Frankly, I hate to say this but I've begun to feel that I am wasting my time here. I've spent a lot of time here critiquing poems in depth (which I gather hasn't always be appreciated) and on the last five poems I've posted (two removed), only one has received an actual response to the poem. And if craft doesn't matter, then I am at the wrong place. I came here to workshop seriously. I understand things being slow. I understand that some members may not have much time to spare due to whatever personal reasons they may have, and I can respect that. But how many members are there here? If nothing else, poetry requires serious dedication. The little I've gained here in the last few weeks doesn't remotely justify the time I've spent critiquing here, offering suggestions etc. I'm disappointed.

Mark


http://www.modernhaiku.org/essays/AmericanHaikuFuture.html

http://www.hsa-haiku.org/

http://www.ahapoetry.com/haiartjr.htm


And while I'm providing links, here are two for the haibun:

http://raysweb.net/haiku/pages/haibun-definition.html

http://poetrylives.com/CHO/