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 Jul 8 09, 04:08
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 Babylonian  Posts: 66 Joined: 14-May 09 Member No.: 798 Real Name: James Carver Writer of: Poetry Referred By:poppy  |
as winter begins
snowman,s excitement escapes through icy grin |
  
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Jul 13 09, 02:57
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
G'day, Hellfire.
as winter begins snowman,s jubilation escape through icy grin Well, I think you are one sillybull short L2. How about using excitement instead of jubilation>> make it easier for the syllable count. I would use escapes instead escape in L3. Regards, John ·······  ·······Arnfinn
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hellfire Snowman Jul 8 09, 04:08 
Cleo_Serapis Hello Hellfire,
I enjoyed your winter Haiku (alt... Jul 8 09, 06:39 ace Hellfire:
I love reading and writing haiku; you... Jul 8 09, 17:31 Marc-Andre Germain Hellfire, not too sure this is a haiku in the stri... Jul 8 09, 23:04 hellfire thanks cleo
will revise and see how it works.not ... Jul 9 09, 00:40 hellfire hi ace
thanks for the advice.
i am glad you enjoy... Jul 9 09, 00:43 hellfire hi mark
must admit not a haiku in traditional sen... Jul 9 09, 00:47 
hellfire hi john
thanks for the comments and suggestion.
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