HAIKU, DAFFODILS Options

[hellfire]

a heavenly feast
aromatic decadence
when daffodils smile

[Marc-Andre Germa...]

What a heavenly feast
Aromatic decadence
When daffodils smiles

Hellfire, I am all for letting go of the 5-7-5 count, as English is very different from the Japanese language; however, American ku should have a lower syllable count and should not exceed 17 syllables.

My main nit here is for the abstract vocabulary (heavenly; aromatic; decadence) which, coupled with personification (i.e. "daffodils smile), leaves little room to concrete visuals/observation. Also, I'm not sure that the tone/diction of your piece is the best for haiku, which are more informal. Here are a few examples from the Japanese masters:

Buson:

Flowers offered to the Buddha
come floating
down the river.

Morning breeze
riffling
the caterpillar's hair.

Notice the sensorial aspects at play, touch/movement/sight.

Basho:

A petal shower
of mountain roses
and the sound of the rapids.

Issa:

The snow is melting
and the village is flooded
with children.

(Here's a "response" to your snowman poem..hehe)