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Maggie
post Mar 22 09, 05:15
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Windy Bill (metrical revision)

Windy Bill was a cowboy from Butte
who so dearly loved beans and his flute.
After chow he would blow
from his head to his toe.
Such a gassy old flute-tooting coot!

Peggy Carpenter Harwood




Windy Bill (Original)

Windy Bill was a cowboy from Butte
who dearly loved beans and his flute.
After chow he would blow
from his head to his toe,
that gassy old flute-tooting coot!

Peggy Carpenter Harwood


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Larry
post May 16 09, 13:51
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Hello Peggy,

Verrrrry funny. I love a good limerick and this one was a "hoot".

I thought of another last line which you might think funny. It is not a crit because yours is perfect. Just something that came to mind:

"as green clouds emanate from his boot."

Larry


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