Senile Cat - Senyru, First attempt . Options

[Sekhmet]

In this Senyru, the number of dots indicate the length of time the cat watches the mouse hole -
each dot = 10 minutes. I will attempt a comment within the week!
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First Revision

Senile cat watches
those dark,alluring mouseholes...
... meanwhile, mice eat cheese

Leo

[Psyche]

Hi Leo!

Great to find you here! But very sorry that there seems to have been a misunderstanding regarding new posts. This forum had practically died.. lol... so it's delightful that you revived it!

I shall try to post a Haiku myself asap., or some other short form.

BTW, you can go ahead and re-post your piece, because the two crits (or commentaries) come AFTER you've posted. And you're not obliged to make a knowledgeable critique if you're new to the form, you may just comment. Like asking who stole your cheese...LOL....! Meaning that comments can also be in the form of a question. Naturally, it's preferable to give/receive valuable advice, but we're all learning together here, as in all the forums; no need to feel 'umble, it's quite obvious that you're an accomplished writer, Leo.

Ah, before I sign off (my supper is ready), the 1-2-2 rule applies to each forum separately. No matter if you didn't make 2 crits in another forum, it doesn't apply when you step "over the wall" to a different workshop. The info is in the pink link at the top of each forum, or click here: http://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?act=SR&f=50

Steve, please forgive my popping in here to clear up things, remember when Liz & I awarded some plaques that should have been approved by Lori first!?...LOL....

Looking forward to your iinput! And everybody's!
Cheers, Syl***