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 Jan 29 09, 20:56
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Feb 16 09, 04:48
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 Greek  Posts: 743 Joined: 3-February 09 From: Abingdon, Oxfordshire,UK Member No.: 754 Real Name: Leonora Wyatt Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:No one at all |
Hello Steve - Thank you for your Email, explaining that I have to comment on two other short form poems if I wish to offer a first attempt at a Haiku.
As I am totally ignorant of all short poetry forms - I will feel something of a fool, attempting to comment on work I do not fully understand. But, 'rules is rules.' - so here goes ... Your Haiku seems to follow a different pattern to the one I believed to be the norm. I see that you have used a 5-6-5 format. Is this yet another version of the standard 5-7-5 form? I read in earlier short form critiques that there were two different Hikau forms - one more obscure than the other - is yours yet another? I also see that you do not punctuate - is this also a convention for the modern Haiku? There is so much to learn  I will have to rely on you to guide my first steps in this genre.  I'll try to find another, 'short-former' to pester as well - and then I'll be able to try my hand at a Haiku. Leo ·······  ······· |
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ohsteve Tea Jan 29 09, 20:56 
ohsteve Leo, Thanks for reading, no problem on the persona... Feb 16 09, 10:54 
Eisa QUOTE (ohsteve @ Feb 16 09, 15:54 ) Leo, ... Feb 17 09, 11:18 ohsteve Snow thanks for popping in, I didn't know thos... Feb 18 09, 18:50 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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