Peggy, This does not strike me as a limerick, first it doesn't read like one to me. Second a limerick usually has nine syllable in the first two lines, five or six in the next two, then nine again in the fifth. Whereas yours has 7-7-7-6-7 if I counted correctly. According to Wikipedia, limericks are usually witty, funny, mostly pornographic and written in an anapestic style. And yours does not fit this. As just a short poem, this is good, but not as a limerick. JMHO.
My example: There once was a lady from Monteglade whose tan was starting really to fade. She thought this quite neat took her shoes off her feet And sat under an Oak in the shade.
Mine is 9-9-5-6-8; OK mine is off syllable too, but more in the form of limerick that is most popular, I am not saying your wrong, just that it doesn't read as a limerick to me. Steve
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