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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry  |
Here's a shorty, note that the writer and narrator are not the same.
Poltergeist When evening shadows grope over the boxwood hedge, screeches careen into my ears here in this blue-lit room where twilight shelters me but still that poltergeist appears. There’s nowhere left I can run and nothing more for me to do. What’s that? I hear footsteps. * There’s nobody here! No-one is near, no dreaded incubus, ** no evil voodoo spell, no booze to paralyze my fear. * formerly 1 sentence with comma. ** originally phantom incubus, leading to probable tautology, thx Jax ·······  ······· |
  
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Jan 18 09, 15:47
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
I enjoyed this one - it does have a lyrical feel to it Merlin.
 I really don't have any nits at this reading. Oh yeah I almost forgot . . . BOO!  Enjoyed, ~Cleo 
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Merlin Poltergeist Jan 1 09, 12:25 
jgdittier Dear Merlin,
Your postings are ever changing in bo... Jan 1 09, 15:40 Merlin Dear Ron,
Thx for looking in and commenting >... Jan 1 09, 18:15 jgdittier Dear Merlin, er Chanticleer?
Now you've done i... Jan 2 09, 09:42 JaxMyth Hi Merlin,
It seems accentual trimeter but L6 S2 ... Jan 2 09, 10:05 Merlin Hi Ron,
he actually steals one from Rooster when R... Jan 2 09, 17:51 JaxMyth Hi Merlin,
Can a screech careen
Yes, if it... Jan 4 09, 18:26 Thoth Fresh and very entertaining. Nice to see Merlin wa... Jan 8 09, 10:59 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Merlin,
I like your poem about the supernatura... Jan 8 09, 12:57 Merlin Thank you for listing the definitions for careen, ... Jan 8 09, 18:53 Peterpan Hi Merlin~
I understand it is a lyric but, I foun... Jan 19 09, 08:08 Sekhmet Hello Merlin. And what a jolly, spooky spine- chil... Mar 17 09, 03:10 mike in brooklyn Hello Master Merlin
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