Hi Merlin,
It seems accentual trimeter but L6 S2 does not satisfy.
When evening shadows grope over the boxwood hedge, (Great opening.) screeches careen into my ears (Can a screech careen?) here in this blue-lit room (here in this twi-lit room) where twilight shelters me but still that poltergeist appears. (where the poltergeist appears.)
There’s nowhere left I can run and nothing more for me to do. What’s that? I hear footsteps, (Do poltergeists have footsteps?) there’s nobody here! No-one is near, no phantom incubus, (Is an incubus not a phantom?) no evil voodoo spell, no booze to paralyze my fear.
It does appear to be a preliminary draft.
I hope that is of some use.
Regards,
Jax
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