Summers Day [revised 06 Sep] Options

[Arnfinn]

With thanks to Lori.

Revision 18/09/2008


Footsteps: tread gently.
Bees a-buzzzzzzzzzzzz.
Aphids in white jackets.
Flowers; confusion of colour.
A hot summer's breeze-
on my cheek.



Revision 6th September 2008


Footsteps; tread gently,
bees a-buzz,
aphid's in white jackets,
flowers, confusions of colour.

A hot summers breeze-
on my cheek.



REVISION. AS summers day 4/9/2008


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i neeeeeeeeeeeeeeeever promised YYYYYYYYYYYYYou a Rose Garden.

john


Summers Day


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Arnfinn

[Arnfinn]

Hi Steve,

This poem follows the same theme as a poet called George MacBeth.
He wrote a poem called , 'Rain.'

This is how it went.

Rain, By George MacBeth.

First Verse.

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This is the end of the first verse. Which, is written as falling rain. iiii


Yeah, I know it's form poetry.


So I wrote my poem as stroll in the garden. Walking down a path in the garden. No falling rain here, in my poem.


But wait, theres more Steve, I'm going to do revision AS e.e cummings would write.


YYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeHa.


John.