Group: Praetorian
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Joined: 4-August 03
From: Birmingham, England
Member No.: 12
Real Name: Eira Needham
Writer of: Poetry
Referred By:Lori
I have taken a poem I posted on Homer's Homilies some time ago...`Kisses' and changed it into a sonnet... (made it a bit more suggestive too )
Seduction by Starlight (sonnet)
The curtain’s drawn; a spangled velvet sheet creates a welcome shade from daylight’s heat. As seas of slumber surge on earth, the night’s soft moonbeams dance in dim seductive light.
Bold eyes entice the sky, they wink to flirt; she fingers silver buttons on his shirt and proudly flaunts the galaxies of gems on midnight’s hand. Bright sequins lift her hem as stellar rays embrace the dark. She sighs when kisses scatter over sultry skies; a supernova bursts in rising clouds a climax of the night … she gasps aloud!
The curtain opens slowly … not to rush as dawn peeps out the sky begins to blush.
Kisses (original from HH)
The winking stars caress the night and sigh as diamond clusters kiss the blackened sky A spangled curtain covers earth below, creating velvet shade from daylight’s glow.
As moonbeams dance to lull us into dreams they merge with soft seductive light, and beam embracing rays across the shadowed land to flaunt the bands of gems on midnight’s hand.
The sky exudes romance and gasps aloud when kisses scatter over darkened cloud. A sleepy moon appeals to night. " Ssh... hush!" As dawn begins to peep, the sky will blush.
Snow, I've removed an odd "space at the start of line 8. Hope you don't mind ! Alan
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From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia
Member No.: 13
Real Name: Daniah
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oh Dear Lord,
Snow, this is impeccable! beautifully well written...I'm practicing writing sonnets and still working on grasping the whole meter thing. This sounds very good to me...
I salute you sweetie! Daniah
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