 Hugs, Haiku |
Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews > Archives > Archives > ARCHIVES -> Short Form Poetry -> Shogun's Psalms
 Oct 7 07, 08:15
Post
#1
|
|
 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
Hugs Surrounded by warmth Consoling, comforting, love Touching skin and soul This is probably considered to be Senryu in a Haiku format and in that format, shouldn't be titled but I title all my Haiku. One of the liberties we Westerner's take when striving to emulate that beautiful Japanese art form. ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
|
|
 |
Replies
|
Jun 6 08, 09:20
Post
#2
|
|
|
Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hi Jim,
If I were to shorten my poem that much, it would no longer be considered Haiku/Senyru, even in their most liberal westerner format. There would be a 3-6-3 syllabic count and even then, may or may not be translatable into the Japanese 5-7-5 requsite syllables. Besides, where is the "love" and "warmth"? Gotta have those for a good hug. Thanks for taking the time to come by for a read and a crit but I will have to "lose" that suggestion. Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
|
|
|
Posts in this topic
Larry Hugs Oct 7 07, 08:15 
Cleo_Serapis Hi Larry,
Yes, I would agree that this is more li... Oct 7 07, 09:04 
Larry QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Oct 7 07, 09:04 ) H... Oct 7 07, 14:29 4rum It IS consoling and comforting whatever the form. ... Oct 7 07, 09:29 Larry QUOTE (4rum @ Oct 7 07, 09:29 ) It IS con... Oct 7 07, 13:53 Lady Poet Hi Larry,
It's superb! Absolutely one of ... Oct 7 07, 10:40 Larry QUOTE (Lady Poet @ Oct 7 07, 10:40 ) Hi L... Oct 7 07, 14:32 Eisa Hi Larry
Like everyone else, this has given me a ... Jan 26 08, 10:37 Larry Hi Snow,
Glad my efforts brought you a warm glow.... Feb 13 08, 10:13 Cleo_Serapis That would work there Larry, as you suggest above ... Feb 13 08, 10:23 bombadil1247 Hi, Larry,
I've always believed that less is ... May 10 08, 11:10 ohsteve Larry, I agree with your 5-7-5 on hiaku as for tit... Aug 28 08, 15:35 Sekhmet Hello Larry - I enjoyed this Senyru enormously, a... Feb 16 09, 11:03 Eisa QUOTE (Sekhmet @ Feb 16 09, 16:03 ) Hello... Feb 16 09, 16:35 Larry Hi Leo,
Thank you for the resurrection of "H... Feb 17 09, 01:16 Sekhmet Good morning Snow - it was so good of you to, ... Feb 17 09, 03:41 Sekhmet Good morning, Larry. Thank you so much for lettin... Feb 17 09, 04:02 Eisa Hi Leo
I hope you have had chance to read some of... Feb 17 09, 11:28 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
What a heartwarming and beautiful senry... Feb 17 09, 21:42 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
0 Members:
 |
|
Lo-Fi Version | Time is now: 16th July 2025 - 22:37 |
Read our FLYERS - click below
|
| more Quotes |
| ||
|
|
|
|
