Haiku or not, Wizard Award ~ haiku without season Options

[Terocon101]

4th version

a soft kiss
upon my skin
snowflake

With special thanks to Lary, Cleo, Liz and Snow.

3rd version

softly as snowfall
she kisses, I feel it not
cool upon my skin

2nd version

Softly like snowfall
she kisses, I feel it not
cold upon my skin

1st version

Softly so softly
you kiss me, I felt it not
not upon my skin

[4rum]

Morning Terry;

Part of the point there was in the opening of the sentence:

I think when contemplating a new discipline, one should study the accepted variations on the forms then decide on one widely accepted form in that discipline.

My intent being that one must start somewhere. I usually begin with research and try to learn the history of the form, it's culture, something of the mechanics, something about it's reason, rhythm, or purpose.

Once I have developed an appreciation for the form (or decided I don't like it) then I may "choose" to practice, vary, or abandon as I wish.

Thanks for you reply... I really feel we DO agree.

[JustDaniel]

... but I think that others have well noted that 5-7-5 though 'strictly followed' by many American fans of haiku are, strictly speaking, not following the 'strict Japanese' looseness of the form...

'nuff said...

and I agree with the need for study into the background and history of a particular form, working with it, and then diciding how YOU want to utilize it to say what you want to say and how you want to say it.

In my view, though I appreciate the care and attention that many of our colleagues give to a strict traditional linking, each of us has to give our own voice to these 'instant insights' and 'aha moments' Let's all take a picture of that dewdrop on a morning rose... and VOILA.... we have 50 beautiful snapshots of the same dewdrop... each from a different vantage point, each capturing the light slightly differently... a few of them PORTRAITS of a dewdrop.

Write on!

deLighting in the process, Daniel

[Terocon101]

Hey Daniel,

Yeah, I think we're all in mutual agreement with only slight deviations on this topic. Aren't those 'slight deviations' controversial though?? Just like the slight differences between various religions and the resulting holy wars

Daniel said::
"Let's all take a picture of that dewdrop on a morning rose... and VOILA.... we have 50 beautiful snapshots of the same dewdrop... each from a different vantage point, each capturing the light slightly differently... a few of them PORTRAITS of a dewdrop. "

Thats a great idea Daniel, I wonder if we could put it to one of the moderators? It could be a weekly Acropolis challenge or something.
There's a name for it too where you write a haiku/senryu to couple a short paragraph of prose. Whats it called?? Haibin, I think, not sure. (just done a bit of research, its called haibun)

eg, (quoting from your post)

"that dewdrop on a morning rose... "

I might reply:

a summer sunrise-
in dewdrops
a red rose

Just playing a bit with 'rose' and 'rise' there. LOL

Anyway, having fun with your stimulus