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Revision 4...
The latticed-look of snow-filled limbs
against a winter sky.
A tinge of arctic air that blows
with such a mournful cry.
Those cabarets in France where lovers
posture in their games,
the ocean's changing tides that show
no days are quite the same.
How sudden glints of sunlight
will remind us of a prayer,
a mother's gentle murmuring,
no love can quite compare.
Red roses that a lover places
gently on the bed,
the joyfulness of ecstasy,
and love for those we wed.
If we could live life over
would we plan it just the same?
I know we'd need more happy times,
less discontent and pain.
I pray someday my life will change
before my time to go,
with many sweet new memories
that only God can know.
--
Judith Anne Labriola
Revision 3 (back to 4/3 as per Ron)
The latticed look of snow-filled limbs
against a winter sky.
A tinge of arctic air that blows
with such a mournful cry.
Those cabarets in France where lovers
posture in their games,
the ocean's changing tides that show
no days are quite the same.
How sudden glints of sunlight
will remind us of a prayer,
a mother's gentle murmuring,
no love can quite compare.
Red roses that a lover places
gently on the bed,
the joyfulness of ecstasy,
to love the ones we've wed.
If we could live life over
would we plan it just the same?
I know we'd need more happy times,
less discontent and pain.
I pray someday my life will change
before my time to go,
with many sweet new memories
that only God can know.
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(Revision 2 converted to heptameter..as per Ron..)
The latticed look of snow-filled limbs against a winter sky,
a tinge of arctic air that blows with such a mournful cry.
Those cabarets in France where lovers posture in their games,
the ocean's changing tides that show no days are quite the same.
How sudden glints of sunlight will remind us of a prayer,
a mother's gentle murmuring, no love can quite compare.
Red roses that a lover places gently on the bed,
the joyfulness of ecstasy, to love the ones we've wed.
If we could live life over, would we plan it just the same?
I know we'd need more happy times, less discontent and pain.
I pray someday my life will change before my time to go,
with many sweet new memories, that only God can know.
If...Original Version
The latticed look of snow covered limbs
against a winter sky,
A tinge of Arctic air that blows
with such a mournful cry,
Those cabarets in France where lovers
posture in their games.
The ocean's changing tides show us
no days are quite the same.
How sudden glints of sunlight can
remind us of a prayer.
A mother's gentle murmuring,
no love can quite compare.
Red roses that a lover places
gently on the bed.
The joyfullness of ecstasy,
the permanence of dead.
If we could live life over, would
we want it just the same?
Perhaps we'd want more happy times
less discontent and pain.
I pray someday my life will change
before it's time to go,
for many sweet new memories,
that only God can know.
--
Judith Anne Labriola
Revision 1
The latticed look of snow-filled limbs
against a pale blue sky,
a tinge of Aarctic air that blows
with such a mournful cry,
Those cabarets in France where lovers
posture in their games.
The ocean's changing tides that show
no days are quite the same.
How sudden glints of sunlight will
remind us of a prayer.
A mother's gentle murmuring,
no love can quite compare.
Red roses that a lover places
gently on the bed.
The joyfullness of ecstasy,
the permanence of "dead."
If we could live life over, would
we plan it just the same?
I'm sure we'd want more happy times,
less discontent and pain.
I hope someday my life will change
before my time to go,
with many new sweet memories,
that only God can know.
If...Original Version
The latticed look of wintered- limbs
against a pale blue sky,
A tinge of Arctic air that blows
with such a mournful cry,
Those cabarets in France where lovers
posture in their games.
The ocean's changing tides show us
no days are quite the same.
How sudden glints of sunlight can
remind us of a prayer.
A mother's gentle murmuring,
no love can quite compare.
Red roses that a lover places
gently on the bed.
The joyfullness of ecstasy,
the permanence of dead.
If we could live life over would
we want it just the same?
Perhaps we'd want more happy times
less discontent and pain.
I hope someday my life will change
before it's time to go,
so many new sweet memories,
that only God can know.
--
Judith Anne Labriola