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 Apr 16 12, 22:45
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a chigger inserts
its pincers into flesh; a rash of red ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 17 12, 09:30
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hi Daniel,
Your suggested change: in darkness, new leaves spring green against the brown - fresh air from poison loses the meaning of the haiku. The leaves breathe in Carbon Dioxide and breathe out Oxygen, thus giving life and maintaining balance in nature. Perhaps: in darkness, new leaves life and nature in balance fresh air from poison Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner     |
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Apr 18 12, 10:47
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Earth's lovely fresh air
poisons plants and growing things down with CO2 Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 18 12, 13:22
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,936 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Ah, Alan...
again you're making STATEMENTS rather than documenting OBSERVATIONS, letting them speak for themselves. I know you'll keep on tryin'! green plants wither in the moist city air; no suspect insects Lightly, Daniel 
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Apr 23 12, 11:58
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Daniel,
I have not answered this because I have no idea what you are referring to ! All I feel is that these haiku and senryu are not worth the toss, to much complexity and too many things to remember. I know you mean well, but this dog may well be too old. Love Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 23 12, 15:45
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,936 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
old man wheezes
in the morning air; pollen alights ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 24 12, 09:17
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
dusk poem alights
rarely in deepest winter; please hasten the spring Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 24 12, 09:35
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Spring hastens to pleas
Winter drags its icy feat Summer falls and dyes ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 24 12, 09:37
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Nature's falls and dyes
detail's in colour coding; not dead-white winter Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 24 12, 10:37
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Winter's pallid face
sunshine glistens with colors icy fangs drip life ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 24 12, 11:13
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
I see winter fangs
and slavering jowls of wolf; but I'm still writing ? Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 25 12, 08:11
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,936 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
writing on the wall
from a branch of ivy; loose bricks this fall ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 25 12, 08:34
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
loose stone fall and break
rain washes the mountain's face cycles continue ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 25 12, 10:46
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,936 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
cyclers continue
to damage dry wilderness; tough to rain ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 25 12, 16:38
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
cycling tough to train
forever round in circles; riding for a fall Alan PS See, I got the season in ! ······· ······· |
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Apr 26 12, 04:31
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,936 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
riding 'til the fall
he winters in the forest; leaves in spring ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 26 12, 09:36
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
spring into the leaves
pyres built by winter's cold wind cushions for the fall ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 26 12, 12:26
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,936 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
cushions for fall;
mushrooms grow in darkness behind the out-house ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 26 12, 13:30
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
hinds out by the horse
stop the hart from bleating turns, faces red deer ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 27 12, 08:10
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,936 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
red deer's face turns
to eye the hidden archer; taut gut vibrates ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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