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 Apr 8 12, 16:56
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a blight, senryu
I can't tell from damn haiku an age-old problem Alan Now, what's the betting this is NOT a sen ? ·······  ······· |
  
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Apr 9 12, 07:29
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basic senryu:
juxtaposed snapshots in one line and two ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 10 12, 01:51
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Just a posed snapshot.
Why the Facebook exposure total overkill ? Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 11 12, 07:25
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
just suppose
it is an accident... pix catch the act ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 11 12, 08:45
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Pix will catch the cat
in social embarrassment; now's time to cleanse fur Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 11 12, 09:54
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
fer cleansin' sake
try dippin' in the stream; catfish eat slime ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 12 12, 16:45
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Drat ! Fish-feed time
throw cat in aquarium then go back to sleep .... Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 13 12, 08:36
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
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Apr 13 12, 09:24
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The work-out put them
at the end of their rope. Climb into the steam room. ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner     |
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Apr 13 12, 16:06
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Into the steam room,
then get on with the sweating til half the man you were Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 14 12, 09:40
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (Alan @ Apr 13 12, 17:06 )  Into the steam room, then get on with the sweating til half the man you were Just a couple of pointers further, Alan. One, NO CAPITALS at the beginning of lines, unless Proper Names and such. Two, remember TWO SNAPS, not one long sentence or thought broken up into three segments. Three, your snapshots don't have to be full sentences; in fact, often better if they're not, e.g.: into the steam room, then on with the sweating; you're half the man your half the man roasted on the spit; mine simply boiled Lightly spit out, Daniel 
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Apr 16 12, 12:33
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eggs, mine simply boiled
mark the true progress of man : assault'n'battery Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 16 12, 22:36
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the sultan's battery
died before his alarm rang; disk-on-tent ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 17 12, 14:29
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Disco was intense
after the rock-n-rollin' downhill from that point ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 17 12, 15:44
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
skiing's on the up
despite what you all think; olympics are down Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 18 12, 08:59
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
modern Olympics
aggrandized professionals amateurs lose out ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 18 12, 13:30
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
embouchure too loose
to produce the right sound: blat, squeak, squawk ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Apr 19 12, 03:13
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
bats sqeak squawk
to a purpose, flying blind predating radar Alan ······· ······· |
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Apr 19 12, 09:31
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
radar shows a blip
weather ballons travel fast are you Sirius ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Apr 19 12, 14:41
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Planet fall :
a Sirius collision with Uranus Alan ······· ······· |
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