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post Dec 9 07, 04:43
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Assigned Fate

There in the thickness of thought lies uncertainty
with tangled tentacles of fear unfolding, extending.
They ease about a motionless body as if in a dream,
yet these eyes are wide open to the stifling event

Time shows no mercy on this tired soul.
It steals what it will and stands unyielding,
leaving pride and dignity but faded memories,
holding hopes and dreams to ransom that can’t be paid

The clock ticks away minutes to hours dauntingly.
Both racing and crawling in the same dimension,
igniting confusion and worry as one flame
to burn within a soul already tortured.

Is there no charm to dismiss this blackened veil,
or blade to cut through these chains of remorse?
Where is the potion to usher in the blue,
the musicians to fill this silent void?

Here in the hour when normality is at sleep
the heart that struggled to fight back lets go.
And once twisted into total submission
is thrust below the quicksand of despair.

Heedless souls pass by in light pursuit,
leaving no mourners to sigh the loss.
Is there no one to light a single candle
to guide the deviated to a better place?

Thus alone the traveler is left in limbo
lost among the spirits that will not speak.
Here in the internal darkness of nothing
forever remains the shattered life of waste.
 
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- Rosemerta   Assigned Fate   Dec 9 07, 04:43
- - Xanadu   This was a good read. My only nit is that it seem...   Dec 13 07, 12:49
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Xanadu @ Dec 13 07, 10:49 ) 105206...   Jan 24 08, 13:38
- - Psyche   Wow, Jackie! This is the sort of poem I go for...   Jan 19 08, 11:03
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Psyche @ Jan 19 08, 09:03 ) 105919...   Jan 24 08, 13:43
- - Don   Dear Jackie, My vote is that it is too verbose. T...   Jan 19 08, 11:50
|- - Psyche   QUOTE (Don @ Jan 19 08, 18:50 ) 105920Dea...   Jan 21 08, 10:55
||- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Psyche @ Jan 21 08, 08:55 ) 105973...   Jan 24 08, 13:58
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Don @ Jan 19 08, 09:50 ) 105920Dea...   Jan 24 08, 13:47
|- - Don   QUOTE (Rosemerta @ Jan 24 08, 13:47 ) 106...   Jan 26 08, 11:58
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Don @ Jan 26 08, 09:58 ) 106070I a...   Jan 31 08, 20:56
|- - Psyche   Hi Don! I've been following this thread bu...   Feb 4 08, 10:00
- - Don   Dear Sylvia, Verbose poetry is well accepted. My ...   Jan 21 08, 11:54
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Don @ Jan 21 08, 09:54 ) 105976Dea...   Jan 24 08, 14:14
- - Psyche   HO HO... Don! Pulling my leg again... pity my ...   Jan 21 08, 16:03
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Psyche @ Jan 21 08, 14:03 ) 105980...   Jan 24 08, 14:23
- - Psyche   Hi Jackie! I've also been AWOL, but only ...   Jan 26 08, 11:22
|- - Rosemerta   Wow, Sylvia, You are a wealth of information on ...   Jan 31 08, 20:49
|- - Psyche   Hi Jackie-of-all-trades! I've been AWO...   Feb 4 08, 10:27
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Psyche @ Feb 4 08, 08:27 ) 106326H...   Feb 4 08, 14:14
- - Don   Dear Rosemarta, You are fine. My stuff tends to ...   Feb 1 08, 07:07
- - Don   Dear Psyche, et al, Yes, I have two poems to plac...   Feb 4 08, 10:23
- - Psyche   OK, Don, I'll be climbing that wall presently,...   Feb 4 08, 10:48
- - Don   Whoa! I've yet to post my poems at R...   Feb 4 08, 11:00
|- - Rosemerta   QUOTE (Don @ Feb 4 08, 09:00 ) 106328Whoa...   Feb 4 08, 14:18
- - Cleo_Serapis   This is a very enlightening thread Jackie. I...   Feb 5 08, 06:30
|- - Rosemerta   "Dawllink!" I've missed you Cleo...   Mar 6 08, 13:36
- - Cleo_Serapis   Oops! Thanks for the reminder! I have a ...   Mar 7 08, 06:41
- - Cleo_Serapis   Congrats Jackie on your wizard award winning tile...   Mar 16 08, 09:07
- - Cleo_Serapis   Hi Jackie, I'm back to offer some ideas for a...   Mar 27 08, 05:54
- - Cleo_Serapis   Hre's some more thoughts Jackie, as always, ta...   Mar 29 08, 07:28

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