'Short Rondeau', (Corrected) ~ Thanks, Merlin! Options

[JustDaniel]

When in a desert, folks can't climb
to higher ground to feel cool breeze
or see the snow, sunset sublime,
sit idly by beneath the trees.

No rest from heat, no water cool;
at night it's cold. You can't convert
it to the day. You feel the fool
when in the desert.

[Larry]

When in the desert you may feel
quite foolish in the sand and heat
although you thought it was a thrill
to climb the dunes in your bare feet.

Now they’re both burnt and I suggest
you be prepared ere you begin
so they’ll feel good in your ice chest
when in.

[JustDaniel]

Ice chests are not a place for feet
to be for long, because your toes
will fight each other to compete
for warmth so they will not be froze.

Cool water is sufficient for
their health, and then too no toe bests
the other; so please have no more
ice chests.

[Larry]

No more we have others to please
in our small world of give and take
nor do we pander to appease
the few who visit here. We make
some rhymes and puns that bring us joy
or sometimes groans when we explore
new forms. There’s few we will employ
no more.

[JustDaniel]

Will we employ a poet here
or must they write like us for free?
No pay; I'd say it is quite clear
since there's no such for you and me.

But who knows what the future holds
down here? We hop from toy to toy
to play. What trick to break the molds
will we employ?

[Larry]

What tricks we play to break the mold
of normal poetry that’s read
in books and on some sites, I’m told
but never joined them for I dread
they’ll want me to remove the mask
I wear. I’ll go with fewest clicks
to MM’s halls where no one asks,
what tricks.

[JustDaniel]

Yes, no one asks in empty halls
deep questions or the shallow ones.
We never sponsor gala balls;
no one would come to hear our puns.

We hope some visitors may stay
to share their poetry and show
us more critique, so we can say,
"Yes. No."

[Larry]

No more critiques so we can say
goodbye to polishing new pearls
and spend time on poetic play.
No trimming off the errant curls
of phrase and wit that others post
who think our help’s elite and poor
like many other sites that host
no more.

[JustDaniel]

Critique is hard to give and take
when we're not face-to-face to see
compassion while we try to make
our observations. That would free

the tension that will sometimes come
with words writ by a caring bard
misunderstood. Alas, for some
critique is hard.

[Larry]

Misunderstood; alas for some
who feel their poetry complete
and care not for the proffered crumb
of help although it is a treat
experience can share with those
who might request critique which should
improve their poetry and prose.
Miss understood!

[JustDaniel]

Improve your poetry with pros
who offer help to tighten lines;
to grasp their insight, I suppose,
is self-maturing and defines
the future of a laureate.
But listening's no guarantee
that you are great; no boasting, but
improve your poetry.

[Larry]

No basting, but that ewer grates
upon the shelf where it was placed
in readiness, my sauce awaits
the brush. I barbeque to taste
but only on the ribs and chops.
My butcher has the finest cuts
of meats; but barbequing stops…
no basting butts.

[JustDaniel]

Whose nose can't smell the beef and pork
that's barbecuing on the grill?
I grab some chicken with a fork
'cause it is done. This day's a thrill
to be outside with family
beside the pool; today we'll tell
our Uncle what food's savory --
whose nose can't smell.

[Larry]

Whose nose can’t smell the barbeque
or all the trimmings that are served
on Independence Day are due
an E. N. T. check-up. Unnerved
am I for those who’ve lost this sense
though it’s not rare but I suppose
it can be cured with great expense.
Who knows!

[JustDaniel]

Ears, Nose and Throat, or E.N.T.
refers to doctors practicing
otorhinolaryngology.
They help you hear and smell and sing.

Wife's ENT just called us here
and woke me up. Do you like those
reminders of appointments? Fear
ear knows!

[Larry]

Reminders of a point meant fear
for time you’ll spend in dentist’s chairs
and Novocain in jaws not rear
will bring a lot of pain and scares
the weak of heart. You need your teeth
for if you keep them nice you’ll find
you will not have those underneath
re-mined.

[JustDaniel]

You will not have your underwear
if you are operated on
to fix your anus; it is bare
when doctor stitches with elan.

So keep your pants on; when you must
go potty and you think you're caught
with messing them and think you'll bust.
You will not.

[Larry]

Messing with busts, you’ll think of them
and how they’ll look when you get through
with clay or granite you must trim
to match the visage you imbue

but if you speak mammalian
and all the joy which they might bring
you’ll know your touch is just right when
miss sing.

[JustDaniel]

She thinks your touch is just so right;
she swoons just thinking of your hands.
She knows that you will hold her tight;
you've given her those wedding bands

reminding her you love her so.
You've always loved her knowing winks;
she'll ever use her brain, ergo
she thinks.

[Larry]

She’ll ever use her brain to go
it on her own without a care
due to your guidance. She will know
a knowledge gained which she can share

with anyone who wants to learn
a way through life all may receive
and if this lesson they might spurn,
she’ll leave.