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 Apr 13 10, 06:03
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 Assyrian  Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A  |
George hurried home for a nooner
When he was eclipsed by a lunar Missing his mark There in the dark Poor George instead faced a mooner ·······  ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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Apr 13 10, 16:43
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Hi Sam,
I like four of the lines very much but don't know what you mean by "lunar." Is it possible for the moon to eclipse the sun at noon? I thought that the moon was on the opposite side of the world at noon. Peggy ······· ······· |
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Apr 14 10, 11:18
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Assyrian Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A |
QUOTE (Peggy Carpenter Harwood @ Apr 13 10, 16:43 )  Hi Sam, I like four of the lines very much but don't know what you mean by "lunar." Is it possible for the moon to eclipse the sun at noon? I thought that the moon was on the opposite side of the world at noon. Peggy The intent was to rhyme with nooner, nothing more. It's a limerick.  'rum ······· ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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4rum Lunar Mooner Apr 13 10, 06:03 
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I would add a beat to the last line - you c... Apr 14 10, 07:13 4rum QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Apr 14 10, 07:13 ) ... Apr 14 10, 11:22 2 User(s) are reading this topic (2 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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