Hi Leo,
I don't know a lot about butterflies but I do know many species are enviro specific and thus susceptible to extinction. I assume the Chalk hill blue is in this category.
The poem is delightfully readable and very clear in the message for conservation delivered. Technically, a good r&m offering especially considering it stems from an x10 challenge. A difficult form and complex metre too, the rhymes are unusual and interesting interwoven with pin sharp images. To me, "The Chalk Hill Blue" is very well written indeed.
S2 was my fav. part, esp playing harp on the bean-pole's strings!
"She's peacefully enacting rituals eternal. depositing eggs with lullabies of wings. Ever watchful, devoted, maternal, whilst winds play harp, on the bean-pole's strings."
Great stuff indeed!
If you want to polish this one more, I can offer some suggestions, but really there is not a lot to crit. I will have to ponder on it at length. The only nit if I were pressed is the complexity of the structure which makes a mouthful at times. There again it is precisely that which I enjoy in this piece, so where does one go?
I am impressed once more with the continued improvement in your writing prowess over the short time you have been active on this forum. Two years ago I dare say you would not have attempted something so ambitious as this, let alone get it right!
Hugz,
Wally
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