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sonnet bref, [ my designation ] in less than iambic tetrameter |
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Aug 12 15, 17:04
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Irregular Cavorting
Iambic's not required, although I've seldom fought its to-and-fro.
Sometimes I use common meter; though it confused, I'm not a cheater.
lines two and four are 'tetra-short'; so don't abhor how I cavort.
Experiment to your content.
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Aug 12 15, 23:15
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Creator’s Prerogative
If you’re content and satisfied when rules are bent or what you’ve scried
of thoughts yet writ in metered verse then never quit. It could be worse
like things I’ve read; pretentious prose which hurts my head so I propose
your Sonnet-bref cannot be pelf.
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Aug 13 15, 18:21
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un-selfed by pelf
What's pelf to do with my sad verse? I know I screw with rules and worse
but ill-got gain seems far afield, perhaps arcane - meaning concealed.
But then it could be that I'm dense - a brain of wood, so no offense.
When you explain 't will all be plain.
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Aug 13 15, 18:41
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Hi Daniel,
My last line "cannot be pelf" should have explained where I was coming from.
I think your "sonnet bref" is delightful and your last explanation of different line lengths being okay just expands my admiration of this form. Your new form, in no way whatsoever, could be considered "ill-gotten gains". You should be applauded and your brain is not dense nor made of wood. You made the rules and therefore are allowed to bend them in any shape you desire. Besides, like Mel Brooks says "It's good to be the King"!
Again, in admiration,
Larry
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Aug 14 15, 00:29
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Reign of Stimulation
Larry is the king of those who write here; there's hardly a thing he won't domineer.
Sometimes I don't know words that he uses; I easily show that it confuses
but when he explains it's clear that I should have seen that my brains had misunderstood.
Use dictionary; can't seem contrary.
By the way, Larry, I certainly was not offended by your piece; actually I was ironically making fun of myself for having had to look up the word! LOL
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Aug 14 15, 15:36
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Arose Colored Gasses
I’m blushing, bright pink from undeserved praise. I know that you think my words are a maze
but things seem to stick in my little brain. I’m really quite thick and it is a strain
to emulate form and style you invent. It may be the norm to some small extent;
words seem to amass and I just add gas.
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Aug 15 15, 07:35
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Invisible Off Fence
Colored gas sounds toxic; makes one's ass seem talk sick?
Think I'll change subject now; can't estrange your know-how.
No one else tolerates my revels or debates.
Gas away; I will stay.
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Aug 15 15, 19:14
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Buds in Bloom
Staying will now be nice, the appeal will suffice
until some come back home with a crumb or a tome
just to vent or display where they went. Will they stay
Matters not, you I’ve got.
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Aug 15 15, 23:48
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Cher-ished Memory?
I got you, babe, they both sang and, honest abe, their music sprang.
It didn't last; he was too slow and she was fast, they say, ya know?
But anyway he hit the trees on skis one day, and holy geez....
One leg can't fight the other, right?
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Aug 16 15, 20:43
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G. I. Schmoes
To the right! To the left! What a sight, they’re bereft
of good sense. They can’t walk, they’re too dense and they balk
at commands which I yell. Shifting sands march as well
‘cause the boots are recruits.
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Aug 17 15, 01:24
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go casual
re suits: who gives two hoots or grieves if lost? I'd pay the cost to stay
in jeans all week; cool beans! they're chic.
in short cavort
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Aug 17 15, 15:30
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cracks shot
covert he moved in dirt and proved
his aim had been to maim. The men
he trained to kill refrained to fill
his ears with jeers.
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Aug 17 15, 23:32
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Purrfect Knight?
She hears and jerks as music blurts, her suitor shirks, yet still she flirts.
No one gets near as dance goes on; it seems quite clear she wants no john.
The concert ends and home she heads, but night extends with man in threads
impressing her; she starts to purr.
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Aug 18 15, 14:48
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a phones’ throw away
She pressed to start her brand new phone; that button part won’t turn it on.
What’s wrong with it? It worked before it bounced a bit and hit the floor.
That little case she got on sale was to embrace it if it fell.
Her sale now sailed when all else failed.
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Aug 18 15, 17:18
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Use Your Head Ahead
When all else fails perhaps you'll read directions: rails that safely lead
to places where each piece will fit; you can compare from where you sit
and see the whole begin to form -- regain control, chutzpah transform.
Next time just scan provided plan.
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Aug 18 15, 23:16
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tree-huggers air
Providing plants with light and space may not enhance the human race
but some will say those trees and leaves, when gone away that no one breathes
so I don’t think it would be wise when forests shrink. Everyone dies.
Go plant some now and take a bow.
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Aug 20 15, 00:44
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Two Bambi-nos
Take out your bow and arrows too, then ask your bro to come with you.
The hunt is on so both arise before the sun to get the prize.
You stalk the woods to find the prey; your neighborhood's out of the way
but not one deer inhabits here.
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Aug 20 15, 15:51
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measures of silence
In habits there are many nuns. They dress austere with hair in buns
or cut real short. They teach in schools without retort except for fools
who may speak out. That’s a mistake; without a doubt the room will quake
and knuckles hurt from those who blurt.
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Aug 20 15, 23:06
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Flirting with Stupidity
For those who blurt suggestive words and think they flirt are really turds.
They think they're cute or what they say is quite astute; they need to pray
instead of prey on womenfolk; they are cliché and but a joke
The butt of joke will be their poke.
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Aug 21 15, 12:20
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lawn dancing
Their pokes in hills provokes and spills
a lot of ants. I got a glance
of one who did for fun to rid
his yard. Stung hard!
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