Hey Alan,
Yeah I'm fairly poor at 'pirate-phonetic spelling' but perhaps your right...what if I leave stanza 2 in dialect and return the rest to the original format, ie;
Shivered
When the night fell
there was I in the dark,
and although all alone,
errie voices did hark, saying;
Na'er be a tinking
dat tis' all in yer ed,
fer t-night an fer all noights
ye lie wit da ded!
Such the shock and the terror
of what I'd been told
that I shook and I trembled
as me life's blood ran cold.
On that moonless black night,
for miles could be heard,
me last earthly screams
being ripped from this world.
Thanks for that, let me know how this version sits with you, it's mostly format tweaks.
Best Wishes
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