REVISED FROM CATHY'S SUGGESTIONS----08-18-06 Wow......I wish my first draft could be as nice as yours. Thanks for the suggestions and making my poem so much better......Cathy.....I really appreciate it.
Stars shine brightly when the moon sits low across barren desert land, where wolves run in packs like jumping jacks now known as New Mexico’s Lobo. Their mascot turned their future around to bring the Lobos to victory.
The wolf is ageless, the Lobos young, in this land of desert sand. Together they work, as a team they perk, the University New Mexico Lobos; in arenas where shouts are led by the band, playing hard for a victory.
When the wolf was chosen mascot long ago at the school in desert sand; cheers rang out, eager fans would shout for the University known as Lobos, where spectators sat in the stands and urged them on to victory.
Stadium lights on playing nights illuminate the desert land. Opponents vie from Mountain West with the school of New Mexico's Lobos; they beat the best known as guests celebrating the team in victory.
ORIGINAL
The stars shine bright when the moon is low across the deserts’ land where a wolf ran in packs like jumping jacks now known as New Mexico’s Lobo and mascot whose future began to help bring the Lobos to victory.
The wolf is young and the Lobos are young in this land of the desert sand, but together they work, together they perk, these University New Mexico Lobos in the arena where shouts are led by the band, and they play hard for a victory.
And when the wolf was chosen mascot long ago at the school in the desert sand, cheers rang out and fans would shout at the University known as the Lobos where spectators sit in the stands and cheered them onto victory.
The stadium lights on playing nights at the field in the desert land, opponents vie from the Mountain West with the school of the New Mexico Lobos and they beat the best known as guests enjoy the team in victory.
© 2006 Carol Dee Meeks
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