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 Nov 16 06, 17:54
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Nov 16 06, 10:43 )  What a neat response Daniel!  My fav: Tripping over clothes not laundered, step-by-step, in dark I wandered, squandered time as I moved nearer, nearer to the closet door. What’s behind it…? Now I’m fearing… and the fear’s not disappearing! What could be there crying, crying? What’s behind that closet door? Inch-by-inch… then hesitating. Why is she so obligating? She could look herself inside it… I’m a man who’s scared… best hide it! “Don’t you worry!” I implore. I'm very pleased that you like this section, Lori. Even though I deviated slightly from Poe's format, I tried to stay with the flavor of his pulsations and the suspense, and I think I accomplished it in this stanza! Thank you. Ya know, I'm somewhat embarrassed to admit, I've never read The Raven yet but I'm certain your parody is spot on in meter and rhyme. You're not the only one, I'm sure. It had been certainly over 40 years since I read it... and then it was because I HAD to in school! As I indicated I did vary from his pattern slightly, adding another line to each stanza while attempting to maintain his pace. Enjoyed - glad it was just a nightmare and your snoring woke up the dead -  !Cheers ~Cleo   If I was dead, yes, the snoring woke me up! I wonder what it will be like one day when I wake up and find myself dead!  Lightly ponderin', Daniel 
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Dec 4 06, 14:25
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 Greek Posts: 624 Joined: 6-August 03 From: Texas Member No.: 15 Real Name: Marcia Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
I'm quakin', but you'll have to decide if it is from laughter or fear ! This one could elicit either emotion ! ~smile~ Another good one, Daniel !
Marcia
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and every person that crosses our path takes up the brush and makes their mark upon our surface. So it is that we develop. But we must realize there comes a day that we must take up the brush and finish the work. For only we can determine if we are to be just another painting or a masterpiece..." 1981 Javan (from the book " Meet Me Halfway" ) MM Award Winner   |
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