Thank you all for your comments and critiques.
This was actually written quite a while ago when I was in a pretty good creative place.
The concept was derived from having an everyday job and eventually coming to a point in it when the realization is made there are no personal rewards. It may have had something to do with a job I had at the time, I don't remember.
Nina, I know what you're saying. I just don't know how to "make my statement" in a more flowing way.
Fran, well, you're just going to have to figure that out for yourself! :laugh: I do know what you're saying about Cupid being eternal and all. I thought it was an interesting concept, since all of us have been struck by his arrows so often, what if love shot himself? What would happen? I have not come up with the aftermath idea as of yet. Perhaps I never will.
James, any suggestions for the line "Cupid lets fly"? Again, I am stuck with finding an alternative.
Thanks again. I appreciate any and all critiques, especially since I still feel like a freshman just entering high school for the first time every time I submit something. :blush21:
Tom
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