Dear Larry...
I'm still puzzling over this one after several reads. The last half of the poem, from "but as..." seems to me an incomplete clause. Please help my understanding here, would you?
By the way, you're missing one beat in L3, and of course requires the reader to vocalize "int'rest" probably.
L5 reads better (meter-wise) as "... spotlight bright... though that inversion is stilted.
Just some thoughts about your usually flawless SR's, Daniel