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May 12 13, 16:15
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PostedI've posted now the 'Virilei'so please correct what I have shared before the others come to play and by mistakes become ensnared. Please drop in soon so we can chat and you can quickly disavow the the truth of my instructions that I've posted now. © MLee Dickens'son 2013
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May 13 13, 14:56
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Hi Daniel,
I read the thread (just a snippet) of the new form and Merlin's answer. Not capable of speaking French or Spanish, I'll stick with what is now referred to as "English". I've never even heard of this form so I've never tried to write a "Virilei" but my twisted mind thinks it might be what women look for in a bed partner (virile lay). I'll be back to that thread and give it a try but it won't be in the next few days because around here, life (or in this case, death) happened. One of my wife's last surviving aunts died Saturday and so wakes and funerals are the current concerns around here.
I went back and corrected the L6 rhyme error in my earlier "short rondeau" posts but not before the meat of this following post popped into my head.
The Rhea Ranger
Please don’t tell me it’s not right; I don’t want to do it over. Ending words would be in plight as would be the rhymes I wove her ‘cause she’s just a short round O. Rearrange too much and you’ll see puzzle pieces will not fit, so please don’t tell me.
Larry
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Dec 8 13, 21:34
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We have no plate to pass just now; perhaps a hat would do? I'm glad that you have showed us how; I tip my hat to you. Let's hope that Lori will chime in if she can concentrate; but I've no money; things are thin. We have no plate.
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Dec 10 13, 01:09
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I’m oh so glad you’ve brought it back into the realm of current fare; for skill in short rondeaus I lack but brain is not entirely bare. I hope our Lori will chime in and Maureen, too, will want to add something which will make us grin. I’m oh so glad.
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Dec 10 13, 09:48
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When Maureen comes, I too will smile! Perhaps some others will join in and learn to be more versatile... while giving us a little grin. We know that Lori always peeks and sometimes comments, gives two thumbs, so will it bring red to our cheeks when Maureen comes?
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Dec 22 13, 22:58
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I wait but no one comes and plays or banters words; a posting drought? No lines of wit to paraphrase their fleeting thoughts or write about the dreams and wishes in their hearts? Please share those things you contemplate before the "Short Rondeau" departs. I wait!
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Nov 18 14, 14:54
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I waited for nearly 11 months and no one showed up so like Daniel, I'm bumping this to the top.
Two Guys
They are two guys who may be wise but have one common malady which never visibly impairs; it’s their genetics, probably.
They feel reiteration dares to stress the thoughts they would impart so first and last they emphasize. Each named Ron Doe, the long and short. They are to guise.
Larry
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Nov 21 14, 15:15
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When we're disguised in foreign form our job becomes to give it grace and not concoct something lukewarm that merely clogs the paper's space.
We'll purposely relax to show we're capable, precise and wise. If we're successful, they'll not know when we're disguised.
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Nov 24 14, 12:41
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Confusion reigns when taught new forms especially when not astute. Dissimilar instruction harms my writing and my brain to boot.
Please tell me which one is correct so I'll comply and cause no pains to other writers. In effect, confusion reigns.
Here are the two different rhyme schemes posted for this form on prior posts.
Abab cdc R of A (d)
[A]bcbcdadA (9 lines?) This is why I had 9 lines in my last post.
Help, Daniel!
Larry
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Nov 28 14, 01:23
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Well, Larry, we'll need Merlin to either clear up his one post... OR correct all of his short rondeau examples to have nine lines, since all of them have eight!
If Merlin speaks again, perhaps he'll make corrections to his post explaining how he'd had a lapse: he visited and diagnosed
the rhyming "d" from rentrement. Methinks he goofed, so bracket leaks from second "A". Ask what he meant if Merlin speaks.
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Dec 1 14, 14:44
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On all of those the lines are eight but Merlin's post: "corrected form" made me consider that a spate of short rondeaus were not the norm.
So I wrote one I hoped would match his new example. Merlin knows it may be hard to put a patch on all of those.
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Dec 4 14, 07:25
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There's but one need to patch; it's his; a bracket's missing 'round the A. His explanation's lacking fizz; perhaps he figures, What the hey!
At any rate, the lines are eight, and if I'm wrong, we've sown the seed for Rondeaux Bref, and to our spate there's but one need.
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Dec 5 14, 16:01
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One needs a butt; gluteus max, to cushion falls for it, alone, keeps legs and back and your thorax from simply falling in the throne.
Keeps pants around your waist and is a counterbalance to your gut. I’m happy there’s a hers and his; one needs a butt.
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Dec 7 14, 00:08
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When needs abut each others' lives it's healthy when we compromise; if selfishness again revives it spurs a greed that underlies
what's hidden deep inside our heart, too often causing love to shut its door to what it could impart when needs abut.
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Dec 10 14, 00:28
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When needs abate and there is naught but greed and want to guide a hand in taking anything that’s sought without regret or reprimand
then anarchy will be the rule and lawlessness will be our fate. I think I’ll handle it “Old School” when needs abate.
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Dec 10 14, 18:22
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Who needs debate when we maintain communication in a home that's filled with love and rules are plain? Seek charity and never roam
along those broad and crooked streets where darkness looms and folks berate what's good and decent. Love competes; who needs debate?
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Dec 16 14, 19:32
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Who needs the bait when dynamite will catch more fish on any day and it won’t matter if they bite. Just light the fuse and then filet
the big ones floating to the top. While smaller ones fit on the plate, larger is nice. Light fuse and drop. Who needs the bait?
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Dec 16 14, 20:33
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My knees debate: Can we support his weight if we stand up today? Would we ungracefully comport ourselves? Perhaps we'd best display uncertainty, stay on our chair?
I want to rise. Is it my fate to lounge all day? So is it fair my knees debate?
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Dec 24 14, 15:30
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My needs abated with the sight of homeless people in the night with none to care or succor them like long ago. They, just like Him,
were left with naught but lowly fare. I beg the world ere it’s too late to think what Christmas means and share. My needs abate.
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Jan 5 15, 14:49
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My niece’s braids are long and blonde but when she wants to brush or comb they fall to shoulders or beyond. Hawaii has become her home
where she builds houses nice and cheap from palm tree leaves and stout grass blades wherein the tourists love to sleep; my niece’s braids.
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