 HITCHHIKER’S GUIDE TO THE DOUBLE BED, Larry-inspired spoof of Keats |
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 May 14 10, 01:09
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends  |
HITCHHIKER’S GUIDE TO THE DOUBLE BED
Much have I grovelled in the depths of life, through many Euro-lands and kingdoms hitched; bad “luck”, when I have been quite sudden ditched, as baths were very rare, so I smelled rife. Oft on one wide expanse had I been sold that deep-browed Hypnos ruled as his demesne: yet never did I breathe its pure serene till I was homeward come, feeling so old : Then felt I like some watcher of the skies when a planet swims right out of his ken; or like Rip Van Winkle who with tired eyes sees nothing at all for forty years when to all intent and purposes he dies; snoring, upon a double bed, at home .... Alan McAlpine Douglas PS I had the Keats poem thrust upon me at school - put me off poetry for (almost) life ! ·······  ······· |
  
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May 16 10, 15:03
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,389 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hey Alan,
That poem, I would agree, wasn't Keats' best effort. Yours, on the other hand, was a bringer of smiles and chuckles. Perhaps it was due to the forcible exposure to the poem rather than the poem itself that put you off poetry. Been a long time since any of my efforts inspired such an excellent tongue-in-cheek response from anyone. Thanks. Lose the contraction in L3 to maintain your pentameter (my only crit). Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
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May 16 10, 17:34
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Larry,
Thank you very much, and L3 us fixed. Don't know how that escaped me ! Glad you appreciate my efforts at spoofing inspired by you. Love Alan ······· ······· |
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May 18 10, 01:35
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 Babylonian Posts: 138 Joined: 11-May 10 From: california Member No.: 1,120 Real Name: karen Writer of: Poetry |
Hi Alan,
You first few lines cracked me up, mostly because I traveled through Europe alone one summer at the ripe old age of 24, and I did "ditch" a few people, ha ha. Cute poem! Karen ······· ······· |
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May 18 10, 03:24
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Karen,
That was a bit of poetic license, I was never knowingly ditched as rife ! But I have had a few that I helped who were deserving ! Glad to stir your memories, and thanks for the compliment ! Love Alan ······· ······· |
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