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Jan 30 12, 16:07
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You gave your all but more than that you gave much more while others sat upon their hands. New life and second chances doled to all in need should be extoled by marching bands. What you have done impresses me, I laud your generosity for I, like them was homeless without love or care when folks like you had both to share. My eyes still brim with unshed tears. Your treasures lie in wait when e'er you bid goodbye to live with Him.
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Apr 6 12, 11:16
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Your words mean much to me, my friend; this long delay was not the end that I had sought. Sometimes we don't know what to say when folks commend us, so we stay in silent thought.
I hope my silence hasn't seemed that I don't care; you are esteemed by me, for sure. Just know that though I'm forward oft, to you my old black hat is doffed. I've been demure.
I'm focusing on losing weight lest leaving you should be my fate -- and far too soon. The exercise I do as well is helping; anyone can tell -- small gut-balloon.
Along the way I'm being blithe; my goal is to be once more lithe -- at least not fat. I hope at length, when I retire that I won't gradually re-tire. Please, abs, stay flat!
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Apr 6 12, 15:14
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In silence, we must contemplate the choice of words which may relate just how we feel when given praise. Although it's earned by unsung deeds, false pride is spurned; has no appeal.
This sharing self, when times are hard, brings two-fold gifts as a reward which I'll relate. The first is a more humble mien from helping those, the poor unseen, their need is great.
The other gift you'll get, my friend is you will have much less to spend on treats or snacks. This should assist you in your goal of slimming down as you cajole chocolate attacks.
Abs will stay flat if you abstain, and size with exercise remain but it's a chore. This calls for lots of sacrifice; no bread with butter; no more rice... blandness explore.
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Apr 9 12, 08:01
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There's much to eat that is not bland though much of it is not at hand; you have to look in unfamiliar places where before to go, you would not dare but you mistook
what you'd not tried for something bad -- a wondrous taste you've never had but now you know there's more out there to seek and find and places where you've never dined; search high and low.
Ere long, you'll find a sumptuous dish that's made of vegetables and fish and makes you lean towards the lighter side of food, 'cause losing fat is always good when you're between
obese and morbidly obese. Your bread and butter has to cease or you will die of heart disease or cancer or be prostrate, beached upon the shore -- there choked on pie.
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Apr 13 12, 15:47
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If that pie were mincemeat, I would choke though I know it's enjoyed by come folk, never been one of them. Coconut or pecan on the beach sounds quite nice. Think I'd have one of each or key-lime. On a whim,
I have tried other country's cuisine with delight, though some were garish green made from sea-weed, I guess. Others curried and spiced with, "who knows?" They were delicacies I suppose but not mine. I confess
to a penchant for food from the south. Etouffee or gumbo in my mouth is like Heaven on earth. Though from Texas, I like chili too and a big plate of good barbecue which might add to my girth.
Thank the Lord for my genetic past which made my metabolic rate fast; sedentary I'm not. I work harder now that I'm retired. It's as if gardening has conspired that I not go to pot.
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Apr 16 12, 11:50
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Who'd think our Larry would invent another form; is there intent? Loglimerhyme ? He starts it off as limerick with no iambs. Is this a trick? We'll see in time.
Quite honestly, I think that he got carried off with Lim'ricks, see? It's no surprise; excitement with the form can make you go in tangents 'til it takes you as its prize.
Loglimerhymes won't likely gain a place that we must then maintain to be complete. We'll let it die and move along and not expect a growing throng that must retreat.
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Apr 17 12, 15:44
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Retreat from innovative change? Just thought I'd try to rearrange the metric pace. 'Twas purposeful, for my intent to use the Limerick form's extent might then efface
parameters of certain rules now taught, by rote, in writing schools. Their noose pulled tight diminishes creativeness which most now lack so I would guess the poet's plight
could be pedantic guides. Without a tiny tweak, I have no doubt there would not be the sonnets of Shakespeare and those of Browning or Millay. They chose a different key.
I care not if the torch I lit goes out or maybe burns a bit before its death. I only want to stretch the bounds of verse 'till doctrinaire hell-hounds run out of breath.
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Apr 18 12, 14:41
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Iamb so sorry, Larry friend. I hope my words did not offend your wondrous heart. I also love to stretch the rules while making use of all the tools; I think it's part of how new forms come to the fore: at first some can't come through the door that's been locked fast. Some utilize it anyway; ere long the new form wins the day... purebreds aghast! So.... Loglimerhymes seem really fun; though surely for not everyone, so I offer you mine. I certainly do understand and certify your fledgling brand; it's deliciously fine. Iamb sure that you'll note that iambsare required in pure Logarhyme brand yet your variant is but a breath of fresh air to my ears so I hope this allays any fears and you won't let it fizz. deLightedly, Daniel
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Apr 22 12, 00:42
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Let it fizz? Well gee-whiz, I had thought there was interest in what I had wrought as a jest or a game some might play. Anyway, I liked yours. Flattering emulation ensures some brief fame, but the name
which you coined feels just right. Thanks so much! The Loglimerhyme title, as such shall be known by a few who might try it. Deny it exists? It can not be undone. I'll persist but there's only we two
who have written such stanzas. I'll say I'm enamored in the weirdest way but I won't push this form. Logarhymes are done with the iamb so I'll follow the rules like a lamb though I do hate the "norm".
Maybe if a new thread were to start others who break the rules might impart their ideas in this way. But the minimal interest I see in all forums just convinces me Loglimerymes won't play.
RIP LOL
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Mar 12 13, 13:47
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The course is set with your new tile; your variation won't defile the Logarhyme; We shan't confuse folks in this thread with how we stretch the rules; the dread won't bloom this time.
We're free to spread and dry our wings creating strange and wondrous things that sometimes fail and sometimes blossom like a rose. Let no one say that Larry froze; we soar and flail.
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Mar 12 13, 15:04
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We’ll soar and hope that we won’t fail to gain some interest as well. Loglimerhymes are lots of fun, as you well know, and give you freedom with the flow of verse sometimes.
I do appreciate the tile; it brought surprise and then a smile wide as my face. The credit for the name is yours; I just hope that its strangeness lures more than a trace
of curiosity, intrigue; but until then we stand in league and wait a bit. Then, as you say, a rose may bloom and flowering, will fill the room without a crit.
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Mar 12 13, 15:19
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Without a crit, some roses bloom but most of us need help to groom their blossoming. Let's post new pieces there for crit and hope the forum will come lit from possuming.
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Mar 25 13, 15:19
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Here's one from last week's Flash Jam 97:
... now with the inadvertently omitted final line of S1! Thanks, Larry!!!
Dear Writer's Block
Dear writer's block, it's I, not you who's got my thinking in a stew. You're always there to put a noose around my neck when I am hearing "What the heck!" That is your fare.
But I've not heard it for a while, and though your gift is not from guile I can't accept. I write because it whirs inside although sometimes it's misapplied, and I'm inept.
So, good or bad I spew it out, 'cause I'm not gonna sit an' pout about your rope. It matters not if others read; their absence simply won't impede. It's how I cope.
© MLee Dickens'son 2013
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Apr 1 13, 23:17
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Un-trans furred tail
If rhyme and beat, properly spaced, were written out I’d cut and paste my thoughts for you to read. Enjoy each witty phrase I’ve labored with to garner praise as is my due
but something is amiss my friend for Logarhymes must have an end in each tercet. Your second one is lacking that; I wonder where it’s gone or at but I would bet
the mouse’s shadow which you use is more at fault than is your muse and left it there upon your document in Word. Without the end, it looks absurd. Can you repair?
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Apr 5 13, 15:15
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I've now repaired it, as you see. I do not know how lines so flee from little Mouse. I use her all the time, of course, and maybe sometimes I'm too coarse when in my house. I'll try to be more gentle now and see if that will help somehow to calm the tyke. I'm grateful that you checked me out, or others soon would think, no doubt, that I'm a psyche!Lightly, Daniel
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Apr 6 13, 18:52
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You're not a psyche, Daniel my man; although sometimes, you surely can contort a phrase to difficult. Impossible to figure out unless I mull and blankly gaze
while cogitating what you mean 'till finally its meaning glean ere brain is fried. Control and c, control and v... but in this case, obviously it's misapplied.
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Apr 6 13, 22:09
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Sometimes I simply make mistakes as when my mental substance flakes and clogs the flow of juices in my cranium so something that I say is dumb. I'm no Thoreau.
I'm glad that you can figure out betimes what I have said; no doubt you'll keep me humble. You often ask me what I mean or point out things I should have seen for oft I stumble!
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Apr 11 13, 00:08
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I stumble too, when something's strange but mainly when you rearrange the posted form. Is that permissible to do; to add an extra beat or two over the norm?
Or is it something else instead where you are messing with my head for humor's sake? If not, then I shall have to spend time to confirm the female end's not a mistake.
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Apr 11 13, 02:36
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Good grief!!! I'd just completed a three stanza response to this that I was also going to post for critique.... and Microsoft decided to shut my computer down without warning to do UPDATES!!!!! Obviously I LOST the whole thing. And I think there was even some tongue-in-cheek profundity in it. Not sure I'll be able to recreate it!!!! I'm discouraged!!! sLightly upset, Daniel
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Apr 11 13, 08:26
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Sorry about that Daniel,
If you have MS Office's newest Word program, you may be able to find it in "recent documents" and there is also an "auto-save" for inadvertently deleted files. Hope you find it!
Larry
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