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 Oct 22 09, 03:57
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends  |
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Once, a flower was offered me I spurned it because I was young grace, beauty weren't activity naughtily I stuck out my tongue Once, a flower was offered me I looked, in truth was so impressed freezing through inexperience budding salad remained - undressed Once, a flower was offered me brazen, bold as any bright day modesty forbids the detail - I had snowball's chance to say nay Once, a flower was offered me and it blossomed under my care perhaps I killed it by kindness suddenly, it's no longer there Last, a flower is offered me eastern, most exotic of blooms a balm, a joy, a boon to my life brightening gloom with its heady perfumes .... Alan McAlpine Douglas ·······  ······· |
  
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Oct 27 09, 03:25
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 Greek Posts: 743 Joined: 3-February 09 From: Abingdon, Oxfordshire,UK Member No.: 754 Real Name: Leonora Wyatt Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:No one at all |
Hello Alan.
I rather like this poem - it reminds me of a favourite song from way back, called September Song; wherein an older man remembers his attitude to the girls and women who had offered him love in his earlier years. The rhythm of your poem seemed, at first, to be somewhat uneven. Then I noticed your full name; a good traditional name for a Scot - So I read it aloud with a Scottish accent - and the rhythm came true. I do hope that your poem is based on real life - and that you are still enjoying the 'heady perfume' of your, 'Eastern bloom' Leo ······· ······· |
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Oct 27 09, 15:58
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Leo,
Thank you several times ! Yes, all true, tho I managed to leave out one six-week wife ! And the oriental blossom is still around, but communication is temporarily in hibernation. I am a very strange Scot, parents Irish and Austrian, born in USA, spent 6 or 7 years at school in Scotland, since then mainly England. But if it worked for you, hurray ! Love Alan ······· ······· |
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Oct 27 09, 21:16
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
Hello Alan,
At least you got flowers. All I ever get is flyers! Merlin ······· ······· |
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Oct 28 09, 19:50
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Merlin,
Advertising what, exactly ? Love Alan ······· ······· |
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