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| Guest_ohsteve_* |
  Mar 30 10, 09:40
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Number of downloads: 0Training Flight Wings up, wings down, slow strong strokes... head stretched out forward, yes ... good. As far as you can extend legs back feet pointed...great. Form...keep up the form... That's it - you got it going on now - I'm going to let you solo... have fun.. |
  
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| Guest_Oludpoet_* |
Mar 31 10, 06:01
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Wings up, wings down, slow strong strokes... Sir, well written! I enjoy the way you paid attention to sound in the first two lines and all through the entire poem and the attached image add meaning to this sweet poem but I suggest you had few more stanzas to give the reader a delightful experience. Keep posting, sir you are a great inspiration to a developing poet like me. |
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Mar 31 10, 19:13
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
Hey Steve,
Lovely inspirational image. The training is to the "T" ... It's always a work in progress to let the newbies move ahead solo. I like the simplicity in this. Dani ·······  ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
"A good book is not read and forgotten. It lingers in the mind of the reader, reshaping thoughts, asking new questions, revisiting ancient ones." MM Award Winner     |
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| Guest_ohsteve_* |
Mar 31 10, 21:01
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Sesan, thank you for reading and your kind words.
Dani, Thank you also, someone sent me this picture among a lot of others and the poems just that quick in seeing the picture. you have to love how inspiration strikes. Steve |
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